Perfection in Dreams (Rough Cut)

[lifeguardhank]

(verse 1)

Fantasies of a vision, separation by miles

time tics by slowly, see your face on all dials

"Turn it up!" I say. "Your voice seems so faint..."

one more toc passes, still anxiously I wait

(chorus)

Enter stage four, dreams of you near

arms around pillow,  I dream of you here

Awake in stage five, once again I'm alone

find solace in knowing

Comments

[jahjahwarrior55]

thats is the best of what you have that i have seen i believe

[lifeguardhank]

...give me your critique, I feel like something is wrong with it...

[onesweetllama]

DAANNGG you have some crazy-insane talent, babe!

[lifeguardhank]

I wish... thank you for saying so though!

[alpinesumo]

i'll get right on that.

[lifeguardhank]

Somehow in my mind this is a country song... Definately Randy Travis-ish, the most emo of country singers, haha.

[lifeguardhank]

Maybe Josh can figure it out, I just have a really country theme going on im my mind so I am useless...

[jahjahwarrior55]

i never thought of it as country... pretty poetic for country but the music is what makes the genre, not the words

[his_x]

Country singers don't use words like inebriate and intoxicate. They just say drunk. But, it is a very good whatever it is.

[lifeguardhank]

I will soon be redefining country music... back to the way it used to be... pure!

[his_x]

It's always been pure. Just not eloquent.

[lifeguardhank]

Have you watched CMT lately? Pure is the last thing that comes to mind.