Well everyone...I just wrote this today. I was in the writing mood and this is what I've gotten so far for the first chapter. Please feel free to comment. I'd really appreciate it
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not bad.. some of the words you use are somewhat redundant..and you didn't stay consistant with your sentence structure.. purposefully? I'm an edit freak.. let me know if ya need me ;-)
Yea...I don't know if I wrote it up there....but I did this really fast. Just through ideas out there. I know it's not to good. But maybe with help. And the sentence structure thing was purposeful. Thats how I like to write. But if Im not allowed then help me out. I already though of a lot more I could put in there...I just wanted to get what I wrote out there for my friends to edit. Thanks thouhg....but tell be specfically where the problems are please....so I can fix em. Thanks! ^_^ Byyeee
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