A Short CSI story

[lightning070]

Fandom: CSI: Crime Scene Investigation.
Characters: Greg Sanders/Nick Stokes
Author: lightning070
Rate: PG
Genre: Slash
Warnings: Homosexual content
Un-betad

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Comments

[beautybecks]

Nice! I liked the tone. Greg is a sweet partner. Your phrasing is still a little off, but your spelling and grammar is perfect. Like I said, I loved the tone of it: sweet and mischievous, just like Greg. The UST was delicious. Well done.

[lightning070]

Thank you! :) How was the phrasing a little off? Any constructive criticism is appreciated. What d'ya mean with the UST? :S

[beautybecks]

UST stands for unresolved sexual tension, although it'll be resolved as soon as they get home.

As for the phrasing: well, just small stuff like instead of "Was there red fibers on the two other crime scenes?” “Yeah it was." I'd have put "Were there red fibers at the two other crime scenes?" "Yeah, there were ."

Also, small things like having evidence pictures and crime scene pictures in the same sentence. You could have said evidence and crime scene pictures instead.

But like I said, the overall tone and emotion of the fic is great.

[lightning070]

Ok, thanks. :)