Broken

Jun 26, 2011 18:42

Title: Broken
Author: lightning070Genre: Slash, Canon ( Read more... )

jack twist/ennis del mar, fan fiction, drabble, brokeback mountain, slash

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morrobay1990 June 26 2011, 17:47:44 UTC
This is something that bothers me a lot: how Ennis dealt with his feelings about Jack, especailly when they were apart. Did he get angry? Did he try to forget him? Did he ever try to talk himself out of going on one of the trips? Or was he able to turn it off and on?

AP put so much depth into her short story...and so have you. He just couldn't understand *sniff*

thank you for this

p.s. I'm afraid you must continue now...

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lightning070 June 26 2011, 18:00:18 UTC
Thanks for the comment. :)
I'll see about that continuation. :)

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lightning070 June 27 2011, 10:58:50 UTC
You're welcome and thanks for the comment. :)

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lovewithstands June 26 2011, 23:10:41 UTC
Really nice drabble, I liked it.

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lightning070 June 27 2011, 10:59:09 UTC
Thanks for reading. :)

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like a stallion joetheone June 27 2011, 12:12:09 UTC
Once you break them they are the best. Joe

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Re: like a stallion lightning070 June 27 2011, 16:03:33 UTC
I'm not sure I follow...

Anyway, thanks for the comment! :)

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emmiska July 1 2011, 04:53:21 UTC
One of the reasons that Brokeback Mountain got me good was how it fitted one situation in my own life. Your text here brings me some memories from that situation.

This is well written, plenty of things said with so few words. Kind of fits Ennis, no words included that aren't needed.

I also like how you fitted in quotes from the original work. Sometimes when people do that it feels slightly forced. But here they feel good, integrate parts of the text.

Thanks for this one and keep more coming!

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lightning070 July 1 2011, 12:57:44 UTC
Thanks for the comment. :)

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