The man of her dreams: Chapter 6 - Toilet wisdom

[lila_libelle]

This took longer than expected...

title: The man of her dreams

rated: T

summary: In their third year Mamori suddenly finds herself being soppy on a new student. Meanwhile Hiruma has work to do in America. How will he react when he returns?

Toilet wisdom

Mamori did not feel like talking to anyone. Besides, her three girl friends had dates and

Comments

[bar_ohki]

Admitting that she's been subconsciously after him all this time? Cute.

[lila_libelle]

I'm glad you like it ^__^
I wondered: "What if Mamori was as clueless about her own love life as she was about e.g. Suzuna and Sena?". But maybe I just watched too many romance movies *g*
The scribble on the cabin door was nicked from one, too.

[dayofcaligula]

I find this really, really nice, sweetie. It means you're progressing!

[lila_libelle]

thanks a lot! :)
I tried my best ^^

[cherry_tiger]

Finally got round to reading this! I must admit, you had a bit of a rough start there, but it soon progressed really well and it became very, very interesting. Your take on Mamori at the beginning was a little cliched, but I love how it all progressed and how it got her to realize what's important. Overall, very nicely done.

I look forward to you continuing this. ^^

[lila_libelle]

Yeah, I noticed that, too.. this is my very first FF and my first one in English, too. I guess I needed some time to getting used to write in English and to find out how to make a story interesting and nice to read.I hope I'm getting better with it^^
With "cliched" you mean her having a crush on Sakamoto and being too shy to talk to him? Maybe that was a bit OOC for Mamori, but I needed it for the story :3 I also had kind of an "outline" for the story, I used the song "We get on" from Kate Nash. When I heard that song I thought "this is how me and my friend used to be when we were younger" O.o and I wanted to write an FF about such a situation^^
Anyways, thanks for reading! Glad you like it :)