Fanfic; Dragon Age: Origins: Sound of White, part one

[lilith_morgana]

Title: Sound of White
Characters: Amell, Cullen, Alistair
Rating: M for future chapters
Words: 2000-ish
Spoilers & warnings: Spoilers for mage origin as well as Ostagar. Not much else.
Summary: She quite possibly makes the worst first impression in the history of Grey Wardens.
Notes: Chapter 1 of 4. The SO said the other day "the should have made

Comments

[happylama2]

Brilliant!! This is wonderfully done. I just recently played through the mage origin, and I love that I am completely see my character in your writing. Thanks!

[lilith_morgana]

Thank you! I started writing this when I played my mage origin, it seemed to lack a certain kind of character building aspect that I thought other origins had. So I'm really glad it works :)

[lian_li]

yes, I agree. And with a male mage, you don't even get the little Cullen glimpses...the Fade was cool, but apart from that, the mage origin is terribly bleak. Not to mention that the PC has a crap taste in friends...I mean...dude, Jowan? >_>;

It's a very thoughtful little piece, and well-written, too!

[lilith_morgana]

I'm glad you think so, thank you.

My mage didn't start growing as a character to me until she met Cullen again, actually. In just a few sentences that story developed, it's very well done with him in there, haunted by his own desire. But in the origin I got no real feeling for her.

Compared to human noble and city elf, mage is truly nothing at all.

[churched]

Really well done! You gave a somewhat flat origin a great deal of depth.

[lilith_morgana]

Thank you! I wanted to do so, because it's fun playing a mage except for the boring origin. :)

[rogueapprentice]

Oh, that was great fun, lots of color and vibrancy added to the origin story--I too really wished they had done more with Cullen. :D

[lilith_morgana]

Thanks! I wish they had done more with Cullen, indeed. He is so cute in all his hatred and confusion. :)

[inversereality]

Lovely vignettes! I like that you balance between filling in important details of the character's specific past, and touching upon the story elements of the game. We already know the story, here, so you just gives us the bare details of what makes it Ella's specific past. Too often I see fics that spend waaay too much time in the player's head, and not focused on telling the character's story

[lilith_morgana]

Thank you so much for the long and constructive comment! I'm glad you like the writing, I like using this style for this kind of storytelling and it's a style I'm fairly comfortable with. But you're right, the rhyme-thing was sloppy. Last minute addition, in fact, which is something I normally avoid since it upset the flow.