LJIdol 10: Topic 12: Salty

[lilmissmagic71]

LJ Idol 10: Topic 12: Salty

I knew as soon

as I could smell

the passionflowers

on the balmy night air

when white satin wind

caressed your strawberry

curls and wrapped them

into my memory

a strand of beach lay

colorless in moonlight

before us

a blanket covered in the result

of cheap wine and priceless

courage

to try

and try again

until we found each other

tidal

Comments

[bleodswean]

This is sweet without being sentimental or sappy! I absolutely ADORE the final stanza and the accompanying sentiment!

[adoptedwriter]

Nice imagery here. Good ending!

[favoritebean]

Very romantic! Great work!

[halfshellvenus]

Just lovely, and real and romantic without being trite or sappy. :)

[rayaso]

You used some very interesting imagery and precise phrasing to create a very interesting romantic poem, without being saccharine. Great job!