LJIdol 10: Topic 14: Campfire Stories

[lilmissmagic71]

we touched the skies

while walking in clay

greedy for every step

on trails beyond

our familiar terrain in

urban landscapes

we marched along

paths unseen by human eye

for decades past

and shared together

the secrets that come from

complicit silence

lying in darkness

couched in beds of denial

shadows dancing in flickering light

philosophical fortresses

Comments

[i_17bingo]

This was epic, while at the same incredibly intimate.

[halfshellvenus]

Gorgeous language here-- the rich use of simple words for a complete portrait of the setting and moods.

The contrast between the have and have-nots was also well done-- where it is not necessarily riches that are lacking, but security, safety, the barest comforts.

[marlawentmad]

Halfshellvenus said it best. This is a beautifully woven narrative with a heavy ending. Well done.

[rayaso]

Excellent! Great use of language, and I especially liked the last stanza.

[yamyam_kat]

I like your piece. It's good.