Chasing Clouds Part 2

[lily_tarn]

Part One

Comments

[i_autumnheart]

Here on tunxeh's rec :)

Lovely rhythm throughout this - it flowed really well between the hazy and the lucid, as well as the past and the present.

I really liked some of your passing details: Regulus in his mother's portrait, the final battle in Dumbledore's office, Cloud Quidditch... the last, particularly, makes an excellent metaphor for flight of imagination!

Must go and look for more of your work, now...

[lily_tarn]

Flight of the imgination ... I can't believe I never thought of that.

Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked the rhythm - the structure was something I've never attempted before and I'm pleased it worked. Also thanks for mentioning Regulus! I really liked writing him, even though he wasn't meant to turn up. Halfway through the scene I thought that the Blacks would have had a portrait of him and that Sirius wouldn't have destroyed it, so he jumped into his mother's portrait.

[ex_pixystick865]

Here via r_becca's rec. This story was fantastic. The little details were so well done, and it was definitely the sort of fic that kept me on the edge of my chair as I waited for what was to come. I love the way you broke up the sections because it made so much sense here. Everything about this was simply beautiful. ♥

[lily_tarn]

Thank you very much. I'm glad that you enjoyed it and that it made sense even with the broken up sections.

The little details are usually my favourite things about stories so I'm very happy you liked them here.

[marginaliana]

Ahhhh, this is amazing! I love how rich with detail your writing is, especially in the later scenes where Harry doesn't remember because it seems to emphasize that all he has is the present moment. And I love the quirky moments that are hidden between the moments of high emotion - Luna talking about how awful she was as a commentator, and the cloud Quidditch, and Ginny's impression of the hairdresser (priceless!). That makes this read as really real somehow, like you're capturing the full flavor of life, not just one side of it. I really liked this. *memories*

[lily_tarn]

Thank you very much for such a lovely review. I really like writing the details so I'm glad you enjoyed them.

[a_t_rain]

Oh wow, that was amazing. It's hard to pull off non-linear narrative and make it work, but this is perfect.

[lily_tarn]

Thank you very much! I've never tried to do narrative that was quite so jumled (I had to write myself a timeline) so I'm glad it worked.

[whimseywisp]

I adore this from start to finish - I love stories that give Ginny a bit more depth. The out of orderness of it all, the amazingly vivid descriptions [I could see everything you described in gorgeous detail] - and the quiet, uncertain love wrapped around all of these characters. Really, really well done.

[lily_tarn]

Thank you. I think Ginny's a really fun character to give more depth to because she doesn't have it all laid out in the books, rather she has hints of depth there which can be built upon in fanfiction. I'm glad you enjoyed it.