I was really pumped to read your fic after skimming the summary, and I got through it, but your Cloud's characterization threw me off. I know that overall, Cloud's a little ball of anxiety and insecurity, but he kinda seemed off to me. He was very unmanly (more so than I usually see him), and it really threw me out of your fic.
Your writing style is great, and I did enjoy the fic otherwise, though. ^__^ I especially like how eager Zack was to shimmy out of those clothes. XD
Whoops! Well, since the prompt asked for Crisis Core era, Cloud would still be a teenager just barely past the age of consent so...he *wouldn't* be very manly at that age. I probably didn't make that clear enough.
Thanks for reading and struggling through to the end. Critique is always appreciated.
Well, since the prompt asked for Crisis Core era, Cloud would still be a teenager just barely past the age of consent so...he *wouldn't* be very manly at that age
LOL Well, my bad. You do have a point there. I guess part of it is that I see a lot of fics that aren't set in the CC era and Cloud's still... I dunno, a wimp? It saddens the Cloud fangirl in me.
I know what you mean. There's a lot of fics out there where Cloud's entire personality is comprised of 'I think I'm weak, use me, abuse me, I can't stop you'. But, he survived 5 *years* of a terrible ordeal that left him a little screwed in the head and still managed to save the world and stop Sephiroth *twice*. People tend to forget that it would take a lot of strength to accomplish that.
I like to write Cloud as kinda hardened and cynical but craving simple affection, then I'll flip back and do other fics where he is still young and innocent of the horrors that will come later.
I'm glad you like my Zack. My take on Crisis Core was that in the beginning, before the Crisis, was that he was bouncy and irreverent at times. He's a lot of fun to write. ^^
'scuse me need to get the mop and towels I drooled all over the keyboard and desk...and i think *checks again* yes that is my brain on the floor, I thought so.... dammmmmmmmmmmmmnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn.............
*fanning herself with shuddery breaths* I wasn't the person who initially requested this, but I'm the one that wrote the fic that I think inspired the prompt. So there's very very happy purry things from me that there's another of these out there.
Gods, this is hot. *still fanning herself* Nng. The description is very much yes, and the tactile images and just mmm.
Yeah? You wrote the other one over at the Anon Kink Meme? That was some seriously hot stuff! I happen to be the one who made the original prompt request over there, (Cloud sandwich and all, lol) and you more than fulfilled my wish, spawning images of S/Z/C threesome in my head. I didn't request it this time but was ecstatic to see it show up again.
:shakes finger: See what you did? Spawning plot bunnies!
*sheepish grin* Yeah, that was me. I keep meaning to post the edited version to various places, but I tend to be shy as hell. I'm really glad you liked it, though!
:shakes finger: See what you did? Spawning plot bunnies!
*preens* I like spawning plot bunnies. They're fun little buggers, at least when I don't have to try and write them. *grin*
I also read that fic and was SO desperately trying to find the author who wrote it so I could read more of their stuff, because DAYYYYYUM that was some yummy sandwiching you got going thar :D
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Your writing style is great, and I did enjoy the fic otherwise, though. ^__^ I especially like how eager Zack was to shimmy out of those clothes. XD
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Thanks for reading and struggling through to the end. Critique is always appreciated.
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LOL Well, my bad. You do have a point there. I guess part of it is that I see a lot of fics that aren't set in the CC era and Cloud's still... I dunno, a wimp? It saddens the Cloud fangirl in me.
But, but, I like your Zack. A lot. >D
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I like to write Cloud as kinda hardened and cynical but craving simple affection, then I'll flip back and do other fics where he is still young and innocent of the horrors that will come later.
I'm glad you like my Zack. My take on Crisis Core was that in the beginning, before the Crisis, was that he was bouncy and irreverent at times. He's a lot of fun to write. ^^
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*fans self*
thankee
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Thanks!
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Gods, this is hot. *still fanning herself* Nng. The description is very much yes, and the tactile images and just mmm.
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:shakes finger: See what you did? Spawning plot bunnies!
Thanks!
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:shakes finger: See what you did? Spawning plot bunnies!
*preens* I like spawning plot bunnies. They're fun little buggers, at least when I don't have to try and write them. *grin*
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May I friend you both?
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