One of these days, I'll post something other than incomprehensible nonsense. Today is not that day.

[liminalhorizons]

Comments

[kulpunya]

I like the repetition of the old gas station image - it holds the piece together and gives it a liturgical quality--or almost like music, with a piece returning to the same theme but with variations.
I also like how it goes from the odd but realistic image of the broken dolls to the fantasy of one-eyed beasts.
Maybe try to find a substitute phrase for "eternal torment"? (Bit of a cliche, that)

[woodburner]

Good point. ('bout the "eternal torment" I mean)