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limone1

Fic: Moments II

Jul 16, 2010 19:58

Title: Moments II Chapter 1

Disclaimer: Bones belongs to Fox, Hanson and Reichs

Rating: PG-13

Spoilers: Nothing beyond Season 5

AN: This is pure indulgence on my part. It is a sequel to Moments, the first fanfic I wrote. That fic is complete and does not need a sequel. But I had an idea and was curious how it would turn out - so I'm ( Read more... )

moments ii, bones, fanfiction

Comments 16

labsquint July 17 2010, 00:33:56 UTC

Ooh, you sneaky girl! Look at you writing fic... what a great surprise! I'm just about to step out for the night, and I want to brush up on 'Moments', which I admit I'm a little foggy on after all this time, but I'll be back! Looking forward to it too...

limone1 July 17 2010, 17:40:01 UTC

I had to do something to keep me busy while waiting for your new masterpiece ;)

labsquint July 20 2010, 17:11:16 UTC

Because god knows... that's not happening fast enough!

I've probably missed you by this point and you're probably off line, but I'm finally ready to review (yeah yeah, I know, you're late as usual LSQ!)...

It's nice to see real Parker fic. Not cutesy Parker fic where Brennan suddenly seems to have this gushy of motherly hormones, but real interaction between the two of them: Brennan swallows a sigh and a "I wish he was here too." It is obvious reason will not work. She's trying hard, but this is still very strange for her.

Great interaction between B&B too. You've got them down pat - the slightly irritated bickering that we see when neither of them are at their best (he's tired, she's got a headache).

But this was my favourite line of all: By now his sleeping face is as familiar to her as the face that looks back at her in the bathroom mirror every day. In one very subtle line, you show us exactly how far their relationship has progressed and the intimacy between them. No sledgehammers required!

Looking forward to more...

limone1 August 10 2010, 23:04:28 UTC

Oops, here I thought I was being so efficient, replying to comments to two fics simultaneously. Guess I should make sure the replies end up in the right place...

you're late as usual LSQ!
Not as late as I am in replying... Yippie, I win! Or something ;)

Really pleased you think the part with Parker is real, not cutesy. I indulge when writing fic sometimes and go for sentimental, but cutesy Parker sets my teeth on edge. Also very glad you think B&B worked in this.

Thank you for pointing out your fave line, as always it's interesting to find out what stood out to someone reading. I try and avoid the sledgehammer approach, but at the same time you never know if subtleties will work, happy it did here :) I actually wasn't sure if I should keep that line, it barely made it through the rewrite, i.e. the delete phase! I have a look-in-the-mirror phrase in another fic. Sometimes a memory for details is very inconvenient. It makes me obsess too much.

tempertemper July 17 2010, 08:26:43 UTC

Oh my holy moly!!!! I have this bookmarked as everyone is waking up for the day GOD DAMN IT! I shall return!! *squeeeeeeeeeees*

limone1 July 17 2010, 17:44:46 UTC

Please to keep squeeing down. A friend brought back the great British invention Pimms from her travels. With all the mint sprigs and fruit it feelt like deliciously innocent fruit punch last night. Waking up this morning I realized there was nothing innocent about it...

tempertemper July 17 2010, 17:47:26 UTC

LOLOL OH NO!! Hee!

OK... *whispers* I am on chapter seven of a Moments re-read. Hee!! (Like I don't know the whole thing by heart anyway) I shall return.

ETA: Oh my goodness I am here! I am so thrilled to be back in this 'verse! And I am hella worried for Booth's grandmother *bites fingernails*

I love the effortless way you draw us back into their world and let us know where they are in their relationship without spelling it out. LOVE.

So looking forward to more!

limone1 July 19 2010, 23:01:17 UTC

I am on chapter seven of a Moments re-read

I think that's what referred to as 'above and beyond' ;)

So glad you like this. There will be more.

doc_3 July 18 2010, 13:09:13 UTC

Yay! This is fabulous. I'm so glad you decided to do a sequel, hon! Can't wait for more.

limone1 July 19 2010, 23:02:06 UTC

Thank you ♥

Happy you like it so far.

1mumrulz July 19 2010, 07:57:30 UTC

I finally made it here! (the alert thingy worked yay!!)...I wanted to read 'Moments' again (for the umpteenth time - can't get enough of it) before starting this...so that held me up, but I have also been slowly weaning myself off Bones. The show itself is not a problem - I haven't watched since the 100th - but fanfic is another matter. lol...but I am working on it & have limited myself to certain days to read & have only kept a few authors alerted to stalk. ..lucky you ( ... )

limone1 July 19 2010, 23:13:38 UTC

the alert thingy worked yay!!
You are now my go-to person for technical queries about LJ ;)

have only kept a few authors alerted to stalk. ..lucky you!! ;-)
Am very honored to be stalked...

Loved the car convo...so B&B!!
I do enjoy writing those exchanges. Always great when people have as much fun reading those as I have writing them :)

You already have me hooked. :-):-):-)
Wow. For some reason my first chapter of multi-chapters are always much shorter. Happy you're here.

BTW, how much time has passed between Moments l & ll??
Will have to get back to you on that. Have to admit I didn't scribble down timeline when I started this.

Yay!!!!!! This already Rocks! :) melissasdavid July 22 2010, 02:10:02 UTC

DUUUUUDE. How lucky am I that I soooo just read Moments yknow, like a little while ago and now i get to read MORE!!!!! Hello birthdays, christmas, and firecrackers!!!! Woooot.

MOST EXCELLENT beginning! Sooooo sneaky, but thats cool. Show is teaching me about patience since I evidentally have none. LOL.

Loved the part with Parker and Bones and warm milk... love how she did it like it was nothing, just whatever she could to do make sure Booth's lil guy was ok.

I cracked up over the desert island parts!!! Of course Bones cant play a "game" that doesnt make rational sense... Im still laughin over "I'm just saying, if I'm there the island is populated. It will be a deserted island again once I leave it." Hehehehehehe!!! Soooo Brennan!

Can I just jump up and down and take a sec to squeal over your writing and how much I LOVE this story and yay!!!! Being greedy pays off cuz I get more! WOOT!

Re: Yay!!!!!! This already Rocks! :) limone1 August 10 2010, 23:05:34 UTC

Thank you, you're so sweet :)

MOST EXCELLENT beginning! Sooooo sneaky

That's because I'm sneaky ;) I don't have much patience either, but it's easier to be patient when you're the one doing the writing. Hm, I wonder why...?

I had so much fun writing the desert island part, happy you had fun reading it! It kind of made sense with the desert island not being deserted ;)

So glad you're liking this fic so far.