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[livexaxlil]

sorry for the double update. but please, read it.

Comments

[mijurnel]

idk what i think about it. kinda weird. not really sure.

[foxxxygirl14]

That poem is very emotionally rousing makes you wanna see the person its talking about and hear her story...I liked it
- Lex

[livexaxlil]

thanks, lexy. i appreciate that. =]

[mynameismud1]

ferzhizzle...very visual

[livexaxlil]

haha, <3 you kris. nizzle.
oh shit, im white...

[_dying_breed_]

yeah deffinettly better as a story you can make it a poem by losing some detail and adding metaphors thats really what it lacked that like i love i love hearing metaphors and i heard some in there and i loved them but i think thatit should be a story and finish it up if you make it a story its very compelling filled with detail suspense and action i loved the part when the guy jumped out of the curtins and yelled surprise almost peed my self ok im going back to the institute now

-Tommy Boy