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[lizzymouse2]

Willow by the Water

Comments

[tapemoose]

It feels more like it should be a story, rather than a poem. The atmosphere that the this writing doesn't really agree with me and how a poem should "feel" like. It could be just me though. Usually I find that poems give the viewer a chance to interpret it and it shouldn't give everything away, but I think that goes with any kind of creative writing. That's why writers love to write metaphors or hints and use foils to show the main character in a different perspective or in a difficult situation to show the true form of that character, rather than coming up straight and telling us everything.

OR I could be drawing conclusions that make not even the slightest of sense. wheeeee....Know that your writing abilities are exceedingly better than mine. o_o

[lizzymouse2]

Lol I know where you're coming from. I meant to write this in a way so that on the outside, yes, it was a story, but if you wanted to, you could read more into it. For instance, maybe I was never actually talking about a tree. You could interpret the whole thing as a metaphor for other things.

I'm glad you told me what you did, because I'm sure other people thought/ will think the same thing. =D

[tapemoose]

Yeah, I can understand where you can interpret the tree as something else, but this way of writing lacks depth and is flat opposed to being dynamic, and dynamic usually makes writing more interesting and gives a suffice amount of description and thoughts transferred over to the reader. Likewise with drawing, painting whatever. For instance, viewers aren't taken by literal, boring drawings of a person just standing there, smiling, with some white background heading off into an infinity of more white. Viewers want to see action, a story behind a story from just a corner of the picture with a hope of tracing it outwards to many intricate lines that make up an expression, a face, or lack thereof

[lizzymouse2]

okay