This is very hot, in more ways than one. I love your girl!Billy -- so like himself, except now she's got this reason to fight against Joe, too.
You get so much into just 1000 words. I like this especially: She wants to tell him about the sweet ache in her chest, how she learnt a new chord today, wants to show him everything, a thousand different things, none of them true.
WHOA. that is INTENSE, llassah. so much is packed into this short story, i don't even know where to begin. the physical details are fantastic. the whole thing feels sticky and slow like summer, and it's almost uncomfortable and DEFINITELY claustrophobic, which fits them SO WELL. and i love girl!billy's toughness, her occasional rage and the slight distance she has from everyone and everything but JOE.
That was...hot, yes, but also angsty. But that isn't exactly unusual for HCL fic. I don't know why it got to me more here--maybe because Billie's a girl.
Whoa! girlBilly packs quite a punch, literally and figuratively.. I was relieved that Teddy didn't take advantage of her. Of course Joe would hate him. Oh, and her holding Joe's head under the water for sneering "nice tits" at her. \o/
Oh WOW. You did the thing. The amazing genderfuck thing where you've got everything that's full of love and fucked up and THEM about Joe and Billy but explored from this new Billie direction and it feels so authentic. It's fascinating and intense and I applaud you.
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This is very hot, in more ways than one. I love your girl!Billy -- so like himself, except now she's got this reason to fight against Joe, too.
You get so much into just 1000 words. I like this especially: She wants to tell him about the sweet ache in her chest, how she learnt a new chord today, wants to show him everything, a thousand different things, none of them true.
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amazing, thank you!
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