Fire on the Wall [03]

[lola_9]

Fire on the Wall

Pairings: GDTOP , DaeRi
Genre: Action, Adventure, Sci-fi, General
Overall Rating: R
Summary: 2503. Planet earth is divided into two sides, separated by a wall. As a last, desperate effort, Sector 17 sends a group of troops to invade the other side to look for water. But what first appears as a simple mission, becomes harder than

Comments

[heatherxwho]

A little G-TOP action near the end. I likey. I liked the whole chapter actually. Getting chased by "collectors" was scary. I hate being chased, so reading about it has the same affect. Hehe. Then the whole Dongwook thing. I had fun trying to imagine him being this ghostly/scary figure with black eyes.

Part 1,2,3 etc is fine. Names are cool too. I have no preference. Whichever you prefer. Hehe.

[lola_9]

My comment was deleted in some very odd way, so I'm not sure if you got it.
I wanted to thank you for reading it, anyways!

Yeah, GTOP action is important. :3
I guess I will use Part 1, 2, 3 like that. Coming up with names is troublesome. *lazy*

[cut_thestring]

Wow. I really, really like this. I am a complete sucker for big world AUs, especially of the sic-fi genre. This fits the bill so well, and I'm loving the slow reveals and the pacing so far. Can't wait for more!
Also, friending you so I can keep updated. Don't feel creeped out!

[lola_9]

I'm not sure if you got my comment, because LJ deleted it, for some odd reason.
(Damn you, LJ. Every time!)

But anyways, I wanted to thank you again, and say how much I'm grateful that you read it and liked it.
My mother language isn't english, and I do my best with the plot and the pacing, since long fics aren't my expertise. I love sci-fi and fantasy, so I can't help myself, I also think BIGBANG fit in so well into that genre. :3

And I'm not creeped out at all, I'm honored. Thank you.

[kireiyoumei]

OHMYGODOHMYGODOHMYGOD~<3 I have fallen for this fic TT__TT I really have.

The collector/Dongwook really scared me O___o I hope Hyunnie will be okay..

I can totally see Jiyong in a tight suit. And I like it *__* gosh, that pic of Ji... Such a cutie xD you're going to turn me into a total Jiyong fangirl! (not that I mind)

The fluffiness at the end GAHHH SO CUTE! >\\\<

I don't mind if it's long ;D With how good this is, that's perfectly okay. God I loved Savage so much but this is amazing too =___= reminds me of the fic I'm currently supposed to be working on about supernatural Ji xD

[lola_9]

:D I'M GLAD YOU LIKED IT.

God, sometimes it really is worth the while to write, when people read your fics.
Thank you so much *cries*
Lol, I'm a romantic, so fluffiness is always needed. :|
YAY! I'M GOING TO MAKE YOU GET TO "TEAM JIYONG" LOL

What are you waiting for with your fic! You should sit and write!

[kireiyoumei]

Aww don't cry! *pats back*

Agreed. We'd be nowhere without fluff.

Okay~ get used to sharing >:D But with that picture of Tabi on your icon I think I know what team I belong to *___*

Yeah...I'm a lazy procrastinating bum. Should go write more monsters and savior Ji.... >__>

[lola_9]

Monsters...? *perked up*
This sounds like something I'll read...
I would like to be informed of the progress of this fic. And if you do not write, I'll personally come to smack your bum!
Don't be lazy, I also need some good GTOP goods.. I'm only human...

Ha! Jiyong is so much prettier than Seung. Look at this manly smoker... so sexy... /dies

[ali_mena]

I was gonna read this on thursday but work was being a bitch with me *kicks*
Anyway, finally got some real time to seat and enjoy *-*!
I'm in love with the story, the plot is so great and those Collectors really gave the chills =_=
Poor Dongwook and poor Seunghyun~ I also like Seunghyun's and Jiyong's characterization here, pretty much as their real selves, if they leave in a paralallel universe of course. And the end awww, I know why you brought Seunghyun with you Jiyong 9.9 Ok... I dont know but I can imagine

Long Fic? GREAT :D And whatever name it has it's already awesome x)
Will be waiting for next chapter~!

[lola_9]

Why, thank you!

It's okay. I don't really mind. Just read and enjoy it! You made me re-write it, after all!
Yay, I love the collectors! They actually made people a little troubled! It's exactly how I imagined them!
Yeah, Dongwookie... I just love him, so he always has to take a big part everywhere! :D
Thank you so much for the compliment. My worst fear is always making them completely OOC.

Stay tuned! I'm almost finished with chapter 4!

[atenais_pala]

What I like about this story (well, actually I like so many things in this fanfic) is that I know that the secondary characters are important, they have their role in the story, and their stories will change things in the whole scenario.

I really like the way you will play with Dara's character. She is a connection between Seung, his lost world and this new world. She's almost a key and I really like what you made with her character.

Alana, the collectors are really frightening. In the first moment I thought that they were using Seunghyung memories to attack him, but now I know that they are made by dead corpses. This is disgusting what makes them more terrible.

More, more...

[lola_9]

I had once read Song of Ice and Fire, and I learned that there are no secondary characters - a story is told from a certian point of view, and from that point of view like an every normal person, there is important people and less important people. Which is why even the least active character may become important within seconds. I love this about stories - when it feels real.

The collectors shouldn't frighten you at all.
They are not dead corpses. They are not zombies who rot.
I don't want to tell you something you didn't read of, so I'll just say that this; the people of Jiyong's side have evolved beyond technology, and for Seunghyun this kind of things will look like magic. *___*