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auntmo9 February 3 2013, 00:43:35 UTC
This is wonderful so far. But is this little girl one of YEK's minions?

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womanofletters February 3 2013, 03:36:05 UTC
Great chapter! The girl is funny but a bit of a brat. LOL "Shoot him if he tries." What a handful!

I liked how you described Lester as a combination of Bobby and John:

"'Boys!'

"There was enough of John’s military sense of order and Bobby’s flat-out crankiness in Lester’s tone to shut Dean up and apparently it worked for Sam as well, because he quit arguing too."

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seesmooshrun February 4 2013, 01:34:15 UTC
I don't remember reading anything of yours before, found this through the daily newsletter. You have a gift for getting the thoughts and words in-character; when I find myself actually hearing the dialogue in my head and seeing the expressions on the characters' faces as though I'm watching Show, I know you've done it right. And I actually laughed out loud at this:

except when his brother mysteriously disappeared. That was a clear cut case for an exception if there ever was one. Definitely a time to shrug and say to yourself, “Nope, not here. Must be dead. Maybe I’ll get a dog? Ooh look, a girl!”

Not that I EVER had problems with the Amelia storyline. Nosirree, not me, not a bit.... *snerk*

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