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The mighty 4!

Jun 28, 2010 19:57

My honourable friends,

our fourth prompt post!

That's right, number FOUR.
Like the nucleobases, the fundamental forces of physics and the horsemen of the apocalypse.
Like the number of seasons, the number of letters in most swear words and the number of boxes each tetris shape is made of.

In this spirit, here are four things to keep in mind:

1) The ( Read more... )

prompting: 04

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It was just lying there on the desk (fill 1/? anonymous July 23 2010, 01:48:24 UTC

this is the first lolitics thing I have ever done so if its awful i reall am sorry ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 1/? loliticsrox July 23 2010, 01:51:41 UTC

soz about this I did it when i was tired and the stupid paragraphs wouldnt work properly

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 1/? anonymous July 23 2010, 02:26:42 UTC

Hey, this is a promising idea! :)

A bit of advice, though: please put future parts in paragraphs, it's really hard to read when it's just one block. Also, please use a spell-check, and/or get someone to beta for you. Spelling and grammar issues really distract the reader from the actual story.

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 2/?) anonymous July 23 2010, 02:56:49 UTC

Right I hope this one goes right ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 2/?) anonymous July 23 2010, 15:15:54 UTC

This is great, I'm intrigued, more please!

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 3/?) anonymous July 24 2010, 00:45:56 UTC

doing this while I am quite alert so should be ok :D WARNING : does contain self harm ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 4?) anonymous July 24 2010, 01:49:08 UTC

Might make this a quicky cos i am dead tired and am sorry if this posts twice am having a wee bit of trouble with the internet ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 4?) anonymous July 24 2010, 11:55:56 UTC

Aww, I'm intrigued, next part please!!

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 5/?) anonymous July 24 2010, 21:13:01 UTC

heehee this will be quite a challenge warning sexy times and a lot of fluf ahead heehee :D ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 5/?) anonymous July 24 2010, 21:39:46 UTC

Great, next part please!!

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 6/?) anonymous July 25 2010, 02:29:09 UTC

dont ask me how long this series is gonna go on for cos i dont know lol :D ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 6/?) anonymous July 25 2010, 04:02:39 UTC

I like the thought of Nick being overwhelmed by the depth of his feelings for David and David harbouring similar feelings for Nick.

A bit of constructive criticism, if you don't mind (I hope you don't and I apologise most profusely if you do). I think it was insatiable_nick (correct me if I'm wrong) who suggested using the services of a beta. I second this. Betas are a wonderful thing and they're here to help. Your story would benefit from a bit of help fixing typos, tenses (which sometimes go from past to present to past again in the same sentence, for no apparent reason) and punctuation. George's name, for example, is spelt Osborne and not Osbourne. It's also should have and not should of. They're all details but a text that flows well enhances the reading experience and getting more readers is one of the main reasons us writers do it, isn't it? (:

Please do not take this the wrong way, it's only friendly concrit and I really hope you post more.

Any reason why Nick refers to David in his mind as The Tory? He's obviously the PM ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 6/?) anonymous July 25 2010, 14:24:11 UTC

well erm unfortunaly I can't punctuate very good so sorry about that and that thing about Nick calling Cameron the Tory has given me an idea so thank you lol :D

and sorry for the fic being so crummy I have got to say this is my firt time writing this sort of thing and I so FAIL at it lol so soz i should of left this fill to some one who can write

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 6/?) anonymous July 25 2010, 14:59:00 UTC

Not one of the previous commenters, but I thought I'd say something in response ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 6/?) anonymous July 26 2010, 02:41:25 UTC

Anon who asked about The Tory here.

There's no need to apologise and I certainly didn't mean for you to think you should have left the prompt for someone else to fill. Absolutely not! Not that someone else can't submit a fill for it too, the more the better. *is greedy*

Practice is key in improving our writing skills. The whole practice makes perfect saying exists for a reason. So, write any chance you have, whatever the topic ( ... )

Re: It was just lying there on the desk (fill 6/?) anonymous July 25 2010, 11:19:01 UTC

I second the thoughts of my hon. anon friend above - but I need to interject with another problem.

You. Need. Lube. That part made me wince. Lube is not a non-option. There's very little that actually stops me reading a fic, but after three years working in a sexual health clinic, yeah, lack of lube will do that. Ouch.

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