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[lostgirl555]

Carmen opened the freezer and felt around for the top of the stack; she pulled out the first box her hand contacted. “Refried bean burrito made with 100% whole wheat tortilla and 0g trans fat” was printed in bright aqua letters across the front. The small picture looked appetizing, with the burrito sliced in half and presented on a teal plate.

Comments

[aledmar]

I do like this story. Especially because you made up the case. But, yes, I do think that Carmen should have a crush on Paul. When you first mentioned him, I thought you would say that.

I do like it. Just don't make the description about Carmen too long, so that the reader focuses on Paul.