I'd recommend a change in motto. The phrase "We make the computer to fit to you!" doesn't really seem to make much sense.
Also for the subheader you're going to want to capitalize every word in the sentence or just the first one.
Also, I'd drop the "we" from the following sentences, or put in a blurb explaining that you have help in your "I've been servicing computers since I was 12" sentence or it seems kinda shifty, like you're trying to make yourself out to be a company.
But then, I'm not a professional advertiser or anything. I'll spread the word.
got a cheap case I'd like to get rid of.carnifex72June 5 2007, 06:36:54 UTC
I have a good unused coolermaster case I want to get rid of. Next order you get, let me know and Ill let ya have it cheap--you can charge your customer full price and pocket the difference
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Also for the subheader you're going to want to capitalize every word in the sentence or just the first one.
Also, I'd drop the "we" from the following sentences, or put in a blurb explaining that you have help in your "I've been servicing computers since I was 12" sentence or it seems kinda shifty, like you're trying to make yourself out to be a company.
But then, I'm not a professional advertiser or anything. I'll spread the word.
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