Comments | lotus79: FIC: Schisms, Lee/Kara, M/MA, Chapter Six

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FIC: Schisms, Lee/Kara, M/MA, Chapter Six

Jan 17, 2010 11:50

Title: Schisms, 6/?
Rating: M/MA
Spoilers: Season 1, so far. Though this goes firmly AU before the mini.
Pairings: Kara/Lee, mentions of Kara/Zak
Wordcount: This chapter ballooned out to 5077!
Summary: AU fic. What if Kara never served on the Galactica before the attacks? What if Lee made a mistake he couldn't fix? Maybe some things break for a ( Read more... )

schisms, bsgfic

Comments 18

joya_oscura January 18 2010, 05:02:34 UTC

Great chapter. I loved the how you include the information from Caprica and Daybreak. Hopefully Lee will reveal the truth to his dad at some point in the future.

midwinterlost January 18 2010, 07:09:01 UTC

Lovely chapter..Leland, move it. Like, now.

rdave1 January 18 2010, 19:17:50 UTC

I'm so glad you updated, I love this story.

I had this urge to beat Lee's head against a bulk head because his lack of emotion towards Seb. I know he is uncomfortable with children but could he at least try not to freak the boy out because he sense his mom is in trouble.

I really thought that Lee was going to tell Adama that Seb has a parent on board but he chickened out and his lack of comforting the boy at night.

When Seb is so formal with Lee, I imagine Lee being like that when he was very young. They are definitely cut from the same cloth.

Great chapter! I can't wait to see what happens next.

ecstaticdance January 18 2010, 20:43:32 UTC

I like this a lot. I'm kind of in love with how the extra history between Lee and Kara isn't changing their actions much yet, but is still changing their thought processes. Also, I'm loving watching Lee with Seb. He doesn't give himself nearly enough credit for actually hearing and seeing and listening to and understanding this kid, and frankly I think he'll be a better parent for it than if he were confident that he knew what he was doing.

I'm starting to think this story has the wrong title. uberscribbler January 19 2010, 14:44:55 UTC

We're not seeing "schims" here; we're seeing one collision atop another collision atop another collision, making this reader visualize the traffic pile-up to end them all! Consider ( ... )

Re: I'm starting to think this story has the wrong title. lotus79 January 20 2010, 13:48:22 UTC

Oh wow. You give the best pep talks!

And you're so right--they're a complete and utter trainwreck, aren't they?

*blushes madly*

I think I managed to work in that thing you wanted at the beginning of chapter 7. It was a bit too much from Lee's pov and was too cheeky for the end of a chapter... but in Kara's at the beginning of a chapter it kind of works. You shall see when I get the rest done and send it on over. ;)

(910 consecutive words so far. W00t!)

Re: I'm starting to think this story has the wrong title. uberscribbler January 20 2010, 20:30:51 UTC

Ahem. Understand me clearly, o writer:

This is a darned brilliant story. There are plenty of Kara-and-Lee-have-a-kid-out-of-wedlock stories, but this is one of the few that've stuck with me.

DON'T RUSH IT! Heck, ENJOY IT YOURSELF! Its been downright painful to watch these two reconnect (however much they don't think they want to), but that's been the beauty of it.

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter...but more than willing to wait awhile for it.