And Boys Will Be Girls, Harry/Louis, 4/4

[louislouisohno]

Title: And Boys Will Be Girls [4/4]
Pairing: Harry/Louis, Liam/Zayn 
Disclaimer: Entirely fictional. Title taken from Lola by The Kinks.
Word Count: 1, 372 [5, 000 + total]
Summary: Burlesque club!AU. He’s boldly beautiful. He’s half naked and Harry’s heart is betraying him, just as his eyes are, near enough cracking his ribs with it’s beating. Harry’s

Comments

[dorkle_07]

Oh my god this was everything I've ever wanted. I loved everything about it. Louis is seriously perfect as a burlesque dancer! Talk about sex on legs! and harry! Oh my lord what a fucking cupcake.

I could read a million words of this and never get tired of it.

[louislouisohno]

Wow, thank you so so much!

[housegardios]

This is just lovely. It's all sorts of fantastic and it's beautiful, from the language you've used to the colorful visuals you've provided... I mean, I can comment on how I just absolutely loved this, but. It's really your language that's enraptured me and made me all caught up in this universe.

Things fell quick between them, but there's some sort of magic in here, you know? All this, while still maintaining an excellent characterization of Louis and Harry (in addition to a lovely Liam and Zayn and Astrid), made this short piece so so memorable. Oh, and the sex was great.

I felt like floating while reading this, so really. Wonderful work.

[louislouisohno]

Thank you, this comment means the world to me. This is only my second 1d fic and there's this whole world of amazing characterisation of the boys, so that side of things make me nervous. To know my take on them worked here is such a relief. And the sex scene too, of course, haha.

Thank you again for this comment, genuinely.

[reject36]

This is incredible! I loved this 'verse and your characterization is exactly what I imagine they'd be like in it. Thanks for sharing!!

[louislouisohno]

No problem and thank you!

Re: WELL

[louislouisohno]

Ah wow this comment is immense- heh! Thank you so much for everything- I felt so worried about this fic because it's sort of long and I was really in love with the boys in it but I felt like I might not be ready to tackle it so soon. So yeah, I'm glad to see that people have enjoyed it as much as I enjoyed writing it, for sure.

Again, thank you for your comments on the characterisation because Lord was I worried about making Loui's voice believable, haha. There;s a lot going on there to capture.

Thanks again, hopefully you like anything else I write! <3

[exposedwords]

This is soooo good. I love the concept for the AU (Louis in that get up oh god yes) and your descriptions are really vivid and I loved the little details like Astrid taking a liking to Harry and Liam/zayn's presence.

[louislouisohno]

Thank you so much darling!!