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The Girl Remembers

Jan 17, 2013 02:01

Title: The Girl Remembers
Word count: 261
Rating: PG
Original/Fandom: Original
Pairings (if any): None
Warnings: Light cursing
Summary: She remembered when she actually had a life, not just a virtual one.

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type: introspective, what: musings, genre: autobiography, length: 101-500, medium: nonfiction: creative

Comments 2

erifnosmirc January 20 2013, 00:02:59 UTC

This reads like an accurate depiction of the small town milieu and the feelings of entrapment and longing for more that can come out of that sort of "cabin fever." The bowling alley and one-screen theater detail to describe the town painted a setting right away with few words ( ... )

love_poetess January 20 2013, 01:00:28 UTC

Now that I look at the "remembers", it does seem a bit repetitive. I'll try to rewrite that.

The ass part. Haha that's how I was honestly thinking at the time. But I can see how it kind of throws off the flow of the piece, I'll change it up a bit.

I had a really fun time remembering and writing this, so I'll probably do it some time in the future.

Thank you so much for your input and for reading!