Fic: On Razor's Edge - Chapter Eight
Title: On Razor’s Edge - Chapter 8
Summary: Crystal Tokyo has arrived. So has Ando Tanaka.
Warnings: Oh, lots and lots of swearing. But other than that, tame.
A/N:. Written for venusorbit1’s help_japan donation. Contains a line from GA. As always, written with the help and assistance of the fantastic charliechaplin2.
The previous chapter is here.
( Enjoy. )
Summary: Crystal Tokyo has arrived. So has Ando Tanaka.
Warnings: Oh, lots and lots of swearing. But other than that, tame.
A/N:. Written for venusorbit1’s help_japan donation. Contains a line from GA. As always, written with the help and assistance of the fantastic charliechaplin2.
The previous chapter is here.
( Enjoy. )
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My heart breaks forMina and I want to throttle Takeshi but my heart breaks for him also all alone with the dog.
Yay and I loved that Unimo wasn't an idiot and married Amy!
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I am positively delighted that your heart breaks for Mina, that you want to throttle Takeshi and love Umino for not being an idiot.
Thank you so much for reading & commenting!
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Thanks for reading and commenting, dear Ice!
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I love that despite the prophecy and Minako and Takeshi's issue, this chapter is full of hope. YAY for hope!
I loved Ami being the one to decide that Ando would be sleeping with Rei for the evening and she's just calm and nonchalant about it. So perfect.
I also really enjoyed all the different perspectives on Takeshi/Kunzite's behavior, Hiro's--kinda--reintegration with the group and his ...guilt?... about the issues he had with Makoto earlier.
This is just a particularly well written chapter (which I mean, considering it's you is like, stupidly high standard!).
and squee and yay for happy with Ami and Umino which just makes everything ever better.
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I am glad that you liked the simple ceremony. For both Ami and Umino, it's just about getting married, not about getting married in a big dress, with a bigger cake, and the biggest party. Those two crazy happy kids just want to be together and together they are. The Lytton-Angst-O-Metre can't touch them.
And yes, Hiro is ever so slowly reintegrating himself, but only because he can't stand to see people sad. It's not that he can't stand people to be sad, but when he sees them being sad, he can't abide by it.
This is just a particularly well written chapter (which I mean, considering it's you is like, stupidly high standard!).
*blushes*
Well, thank you.
*blushes some more*
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Once again, I am in awe of what an emotional rollercoaster you are able to put me through within the span of one chapter. I go from crying to laughing to cheering to crying to more crying to grinning like crazy to crying some more. It is just hard to keep up with you!
It was the morning after, and for once, the breakfast fairy didn’t deliver.
AGH THIS LINE ALONE IS MURDER. RIGHT IN THE GUT.
Kunzite had been a weapon
Goddamn, if that isn't the most accurate and terrifying description of Kunzite ever written.
Ando put a mug of black coffee in front of him, setting it down with a thunk. It was the one he had made for himself, but Umino looked like he needed it more. “He wouldn’t have hurt me.”I love this firstly because Ando gave up his coffee for Umino, and that is how we know they are best bros. And secondly, because once again you show off just how infinitely complex your characters and their thoughts and motivations are. Ando, the man who is the LEAST sympathetic of ( ... )
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*is sly*
I love this firstly because Ando gave up his coffee for Umino, and that is how we know they are best bros. And secondly, because once again you show off just how infinitely complex your characters and their thoughts and motivations are. Ando, the man who is the LEAST sympathetic of Takeshi, refuses to see him as Kunzite. Maybe because that would mean acknowledging who he is, too. But he is so confident that Takeshi is too strong to become that and agh have I told you lately how much I love Ando?I think you might have mentioned it once or twice, as has Charlie. Ando can be such a doll, in his own chain-smoking, annoying, caring way. Him giving Umino his coffee is the equivalent of me giving someone else the last chocolate bar in the house. It's a sign of love ( ... )
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As much as the angst kills me, I adore the pain because it makes me appreciate all the small, happy moments in anything you write. Not to mention how it all flows beautifully and each scene stops just in time to keep me reading hoping that it will continue later.
The wedding totally distracted me from anything sad, and the way that Ami trusts Umino "Ami exhaled. If he said everything was okay, then it was." is beautiful ( ... )
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The whole time I was reading, I was waiting for a Takeshi moment. What he was doing, where he was hiding, what he was thinking... There was a lot about the rest of the characters, but Takeshi hides from the readers in this chapter the same way he hides from everyone else: he makes one phone call, and that is the most he's heard from.
I couldn't have put it better myself. He is indeed hiding, from the reader as much as from the other characters. A Takeshi-less chapter was odd to write, but even without him being there, he has a very strong presence. He is the one everyone is thinking about, everyone is worried about.
At least he has the guilt, though. That shows that he's not a complete prick.As you said, he tries to do what's best for his loved ones, and unlikely anyone else, he has not set up Mamoru or Usagi as his number one ( ... )
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