ok here is my story its not finished but anyway

[lovingislosing5]

Once upon a time, there was a girl she was lonely and she was sad. Her name was Rose. She was an orphan and she ran away from her home. See her parents died in a terrible plane crash. he rest of her family she did not knowthis where the our story begins. it is a Friday in October, her birthday in fact, she is on a street coner singing her heart out

Comments

[redphotostar03]

That was good, but a little not wordy enough. You need to add more detail. THere you go, there is my critic.

[logan_neal]

hey M.E.B. sorry ive been really busy lately, i wish i could be on more, but ive got to study for exames, helll im so busy i can't even find time for that i miss you so much, and i wish you were here or i was there iunno one or te other either would be good