(TRC) Rhyme and reason-2

[lucid_babbles]

Comments

[micah_piper]

This sounds very interesting so far. I can't wait to read the rest. The only thing that I felt was a little off was Kurogane's reaction to the speaker in the bar in the last chapter. I realize that he was inadvertently speaking about the cause for Kurogane's parents' deaths, but I still think that Kurogane is smarter than to just up and change his mind on a matter to follow a man without even checking it out first.

[lucid_babbles]

That's the thing that was giving me a headache the whole time I was writing. I was trying not to kill myself over the "oh crap, Kurogane so wouldn't do that, and Fai's just wacko, this is no good", but it would be hard to work the plot otherwise.

Thank you!

[micah_piper]

I understand, and this is definately not, "no good." It is, in fact, quite good, and I really wish that you would finish it...please?...