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[luciferhisaki]

Standing over him, Squall panted heavily, wondering why he felt so hurt right now. Before him on the ground was his rival, Almasy-Seifer-the Sorceress’s Knight, defeated. He shouldn’t be feeling the way he was now. They were one step closer to saving the world from Ultimecia but now? Now all he could think about was how many times he imagined his

Comments

[irish_ais]

I like this; you've got a good grasp on Squall's voice for most of the story. What threw me, though, was the line about "crying inside." It's kind of cliche, and not really Squall at all. I think this has the potential to be a really strong piece, though-- you're pretty much there!

[wyvern_elavie]

Hmm... A bit late, but I have to agree that the crying inside thing is a bit too much of a cliché for Squall. But I really like the way you captured both sides of the relationships, making them both similar and dissimilar. And the title. I usually find that the title is the least well thought out part of most stories, but yours is so fitting--not only because it's the basic chorus line. Awesome job.

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[anonymous]

i'm obsessed with reading, my family jokes that i don't read books i devour them. And i have to say that this is right up there with some of the best of them in that it can provoke emotion. thank you for posting it for others enjoyment. and keep writing please.

[gracespradlin]

This was fantastic. Squall's inner turmoil is very palpable. :)