Comments | luigi_larosa: Here we go again.

luigi_larosa

Here we go again.

Mar 25, 2004 13:16

For those of you who remember, last year there was a veritable tidal wave of people making "QuizYourFriends" quizzes. I thought it was over, until someone convinced me last night to do another ( Read more... )

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wazawaii March 25 2004, 14:40:51 UTC

I got 'em all right! I almost forgot about the robot line, though.

Ch. 1 - Ch.5 dramagirl713 March 25 2004, 20:02:22 UTC

So, Jeff. I read the 5 chapters of your story and so I'm giving you feedback. First off, I love the premise. The story is engaging and flows really nicely. Although I don't completely understand what is going on with the characters, I assume that Teddy, Jason, Irwin and Leonard(formally) are all the same person, but separate pieces of their personality. If that is the case, I applaud you for the creativity. I love it. Now, what could be better? Well, I would move away from phrases such as "A good example of that is". It sounds to report-like instead of a narrative. Also, make sure the relationship between the characters is clear to the audience. You don't want them to be sooo confused by their interaction that they get lost in the words. Other than that, I think it's great. It keft me entertained. Good luck and charge on!

mitch anonymous March 28 2004, 23:21:11 UTC

I totally sucked on your quiz. I'm a little ashamed

Re: mitch luigi_larosa March 29 2004, 10:52:41 UTC

It's all right. It was mostly inside jokes, anyway.