Kinda Weird - Jack/Liz

[lynn_42]

 

Comments

[templargirl]

Jack: you're totally trying to seduce her! xD
great story :D

[lynn_42]

Haha, I tried to keep his intentions ambiguous, so I'm glad that seemed to work. :) Thanks so much for reading!

[lynn_42]

I know, right? It's so obviously possible that it makes me wonder if they're blind. :)

Thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked it.

[ams87]

Awwwwh I love this. So sweet and very in character. :)

[lynn_42]

Thanks so much!

[lydiandme]

bravo! great job. this is gonna be in my head all day at school so thanks for that (i swear no sarcasm is intended with that) great job and keep up the good work

[lynn_42]

Aw, well I'm glad I could give you pleasant thoughts throughout the school day (because I know I often need them to get through the day). Thanks so much for reading!

[lz1982]

Well, now I want to know what happens after this.

“Lemon, you’re an award-winning follower. Of course it’s a good idea,” he told her impatiently.

Ha-ha.

If I have any concrit, it would be that the POV shifts around here--sometimes we're getting Liz's thoughts and sometimes Jack's. I think you could switch POV midway if it was delineated somehow.

[lynn_42]

I'm pretty sure this is going to stand as it is, but I'm glad you liked it enough to care about what happens next.

Thanks so much for the concrit! I never feel like people give enough of it. I definitely see what you mean, and I'll watch out for that in future fics. :)

[lz1982]

Seriously, I feel your pain because I am always asking for concrit, and it seems like people are hesitant a lot of the time. I mean, I wouldn't want someone to just anonymously post "This sucks!" but I know my stuff isn't perfect, and an outsider perspective is sometimes helpful.