Along the Forest Road: Chapter 11

[lytrigian]

Triage is no fun.

Comments

[shayna611]

Nice job, very moving. If you hadn't posted it so soon, I was going to yell at you for leaving the last one hanging ;)

one error - 'By the time Kit finished with the everyone'

[lytrigian]

Ah, once again I meet my nemesis: the definite article.

DAMN YOU, THE!

Thank you, though. My feeling was that dealing with this kind of thing is always painful and emotionally draining, but especially so the first time, and I did my best to convey that. (Remembering that Kitaro would do his best to avoid losing it in front of anyone.)

[shayna611]

His behavior was definitely appropriate and in character.

[tmelange]

Very nice, emotional scene. You handled it perfectly. I'm amazed at your consistency with the characterizations. You ended jonn so well. Bravo!