The creek don't rise

[m_malcontent]

Here we are at Mueller's Creek. Are you sure boy? You want to shoot it out with a known killer like me because of words

Comments

[nikkiii_brown]

IMO it's not weak at all. This was a great and intriguing starting point to what I'm sure you will turn into a great story! I really liked it. Short, but to the point and with a good ending that doesn't leave you wondering, but also leaves room to continue.

I hope your mom gets well soon!

[halfshellvenus]

I hope your mom is doing better.

I liked this little vignette, both the tone and the shift in reality at the end. :)

[static_abyss]

I'm sorry to hear about your mom. I hope she feels better soon.

I did like this piece and was interested to know where you would take it next. My favorite part was that your main character cheated. It gave him character and intrigue.