[✐fanfic] yugioh: tendershipping

[made_in_wonder]

Just what the title says. Rough, aimless tendershipping.

Here you go.

Comments

[arostine]

Did...did the beginning of this fic get deleted? I thought I remembered reading an introductory part about the spirit paying his rent and Ryou being ungrateful...but this for some reason is opening on 'Having to retrain his host, like the owner of an unruly pet....'

IDK if you deleted the first part purposefully, but the progression was kind of what made the fic for me. 8(

[made_in_wonder]

Yeah, I edited it (and should have put a note about that); the first part had such a different tone and such a different narrative style that while I liked the progression too, it felt - clunky? - when I read it, like I was trying to mash two fics together.

I might try to put the first part back as something more narrative-sounding, since I do agree the progression's important, but the way I had it written up was just infodump.

Sorry to disappoint. :( I'll take that into account and maybe make a "final version" if I can think of a way to do that first part I'm happy with.

[arostine]

Ah no, I didn't mean to be such a negative nancy, I really did like the fic! D: (Clearly I need to have my coffee and change out of my crabby-pajamas) But I didn't feel like the first part and the second part felt like two fics together, not at all

[made_in_wonder]

Nah, it's fine! I worried while I was editing that maybe I'd be confusing people by changing it...

It really is a "I don't like how I wrote this" issue that made me take the first part down, so it may indeed come back if I can rephrase those same points in a way that feels cohesive to me. I do like the idea of this being a progression, and I like even more the idea that even the tendershipping itself is a NOT AS PLANNED on YnB's part.

Thanks for the feedback. <3 I appreciate it in all its forms so never feel bad or hesitate to leave concrit!

[made_in_wonder]

Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! ^_^

Oh Ryou, indeed... @-@