Transient

[magazhchi]

She ran in the meadows with outstretched arms, looking up in the sky. A fleet of birds passed over the clear blue ocean, which reflected in her eyes. Euphoria swept her unruly curls back and she breezed past the strong wind aiming for the horizon. Her heartbeat matched her excitement

Comments

[halfshellvenus]

So many vivid pictures and emotions here, and the true nightmare is either powerlessness or the realization that you almost-- or did, or could have-- made the wrong decision.

[magazhchi]

Happy to know it came across. Yes, that exactly was the aim because I myself couldn't come up with a decision and the mind kept going back to "What if it is wrong?And it's too late to rectify. It could haunt you for life!"
Thank you for commenting *smiles*

[dee_aar2]

Troubled childhood ?

" And just when she did that another child appeared; the one that she always wanted for herself- her mirror image. " That line has left me pondering .... did she end up sacrificing herself for others ? Did she sacrifice her desires so that others may have peace ?

The imagery was strong and vivid. The last line and the hopelessness of it all ... caught me.

[magazhchi]

Happy to know that you got involved in the story. Though, frankly speaking even I don't know.. It just flowed this way( I didn't knew who will be on the other track till I wrote it) and I decided to leave it to the readers to reach a conclusion.
My mind came up with multiple scenarios where she could feel this way. Two you have already stated.
The others :
1. Post general anesthesia experience where the girl has just opted for abortion and can't reverse it last minute.
2. Someone who is craving for a kid and blames herself sub-consciously.
3. It's just a recurring dream whose answer even the protagonist doesn't know.( past life trauma)

Thank you for commenting *smiles*

[murielle]

This is so vivid! So rich and beautiful, until it isn't. Until it becomes heartbreaking, and dread filled.

Great take on the prompt. Great job!

[magazhchi]

Thank you.*smiles* That was my intention and I am happy to know it worked for you.

[devilz_workshop]

Beautiful and sad. I think she was reaching out to her younger self; to be whoever she wanted to be and not what she had eventually become. Very well written.

[magazhchi]

Thank you.*smiles* Its interesting to read different interpretations of the same. Happy to know it worked for you.