Description Scene

[magicheide]

Regrettably, I am still behind and frustrated with my writing class. My first description scenes (passage of time assignment posted here 2/9) were clobbered by the teacher as containing too much detail

Comments

[katt1028]

My quick thought impression... perhaps some inner dialogue... like what she is thinking... how is she feeling... along with what she is doing.

[magicheide]

Thanks! Yes, I agree totally that would have made the answers more evident. Regrettably. we were supposed to convey the information withour dialogue. The rubric is as given and I *hoped* to convey the answers to the questions anyway... I am up against another roadblock in that most of the people in my class are quite young and/or inexperienced and had no idea what I was talking about...go figure.