New SGA fic: Forget Me Not (5 of 5)

[maisierita]

Together, all of John and Rodney's things-packed carefully into separate bags, because they have separate quarters, separate lives-do not take up very much room, and weigh very little. John wants to carry Rodney's bag but on this Rodney takes a firm stance. "You're not my servant anymore," he hisses. "You don't want to show up in front of all those

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[janne_d]

Oh, that was really, really cool. You had me all full of tension about John degrading from Treatments and it was fascinating seeing how Rodney saw him and how Rodney saw different facets right after John was subdued. I thought the part after the other Atlanteans turned up was excellent - all those different reactions from Teyla and Lorne and Carter and John getting his memory and Rodney analysing all of it...

In conclusion: this was great. I really enjoyed it.

[maisierita]

Okay, you were the first to fb and so you get the first reply. I am very daunted by the 100+ comments to reply to. Very unexpected, though delightful.

I am very glad you felt the tension! It's so hard as an author to know how things will hit the readers.

Thank you so much for commenting. You get a special star for being the first. :)

[sapphiresmuse]

You get a special star for being the first. :)

Bet she'd rather have John in black leather ...

:::practicing my stalking...how am I doing?:::

[maisierita]

This is not very stalkery. ;)

[sweeneybird]

This was great! I found myself skipping ahead because I was desperate to know what happened next - really compelling. The whole premise was well executed and I loved your characterizations - well played!

[maisierita]

Heh. I used to skip ahead in books all the time, so I totally sympathize with that desperation.

Thank you so much for your kind words!

[seekergeek]

This was hugely, hugely awesome. I love long plotty stories and this hit the spot perfectly. YOU ARE MARVELOUS.

[maisierita]

I wish you could see the huge grin on my face right now. :) I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

[jadesfire]

Wow. I'm so meant to be hoovering right now. Blow that.

This was an awesome story, built up so well and feeling much shorter than your word count tells me it is. I've read a few 'John and Rodney as slaves/prisoners for months' stories, but this is the first I've really believed, right down to the conclusion. I loved John holding the gun and the tension in that scene, and his whispered conversation with Rodney ("Do you trust me?"/"You tell me" oh boys!) Your Rodney voice is great, and I love the resolution and the happy ending. There's wit and humour and angst and everything in spades and did I mention I love this story?

So much enjoyed - thanks!

[maisierita]

I couldn't believe the word count either! I checked it multiple times. I thought this was a little story except then I realized it really wasn't.

I am very incredibly flattered by your compliments. And I also love the whispered conversation so I'm thrilled you picked it out.

Thank you so much for writing. :)

[aretria]

Very good story. That society had me very, very uncomfortable. Loved the scene, where John persuaded Rodney to try the device, despite its effects.

[maisierita]

Cool. I'm glad you enjoyed it.