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Beautifully Wicked Part 2

Jun 14, 2011 15:38

Second part of my PWP story. I've only revised it once, so it is rather raw. Comments and criticism are welcome, as always, and I hope people here enjoy it.

Beautifully Wicked

Part 2

By

Jeremy Harper

Avatar: The Last Airbender is the property of of Michael Dante DeMartino and Bryan Konietzko and is used without permission.

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yukinoomoni June 15 2011, 16:20:56 UTC

Oh Ty Lee. You're too sexy for everyone. Also, heehee, girl-on-girl is usually exciting for men.

One typo - Katara's name - you spelt it with an "i".

I also love how you portray Toph here. I love her relationship with Zuko, too. It's sweet!

j_harper June 15 2011, 17:41:55 UTC

Hey there!

Yes, Ty Lee is just too cute for words. And yeah, girl-on-girl is one of the stock male sexual fantasies, though hopefully Zuko's initial gobstopped reaction to his 'birthday gift' was in character. I hope that when I start writing the actual scene I depict it, if not exactly realistically, then at least sensitively and thoughtfully towards all the participants, not having just Zuko as the focus of the goings on. We'll see.

Thanks for the typo catch - no matter how often you look over something, you always miss at least one thing, and that typo is just plain embarrassing.

I like the idea of Zuko and Toph having an affectionate sibling relationship (I have a thought that perhaps sometime in the future he adopts her into his house and clan, if she ends up having a very serious fight with her parents).

dark_malignity June 16 2011, 12:15:22 UTC

wow, i love the idea of Zuko/ Mai + Mai/ Ty Lee. Havent come across any though. Shall look forward to the next part. :D

your sokka was awesome. very minor role, but he made it feel like a real Avatar episode.

j_harper June 17 2011, 02:53:48 UTC

Thank you very much.

There's a story by BirdsAreCalling on FFNet called _Five Threesomes Zuko Never Had_ that's Zuko/Mai/Ty Lee. Three of the scenarios are rather grim, or at least dark, but the other two, _Patriarch_ and _Friends_, are quite humorous. I think it was written pre-Season 3, or at the very least pre-Season Finale, so it may feel a bit strange, but then again the title pretty much declares it's AU.