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makaylaamanda

Watching me burn - Part One.

Jul 18, 2010 00:22

Title: Watching me burn.

Pairing: Adam/Tommy

Warning: Rape, attempted suicide and murder.

Summary: I guess I can't say I hate the pain, at least the fact that I'm feeling the pain means I'm still human. Tonight's the fifth month that this is happening, will it ever end? I know he hears me whimpering in pain, why doesn't he stop? He seemed so good to ( Read more... )

adommy/lambliff - watching me burn.

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dreamsofspike July 17 2010, 16:40:20 UTC

*shivers*

this is horrific, love :( the fear and shame and trauma of it all are almost tangible... so intense and heartbreaking, and i can't wait to see how you get adam and neil out of this situation... very dark but very fascinating, can't wait for the next chapter, love :) *Hugs*

makaylaamanda July 17 2010, 17:13:04 UTC

Thanks bby! <3

jeweledvixen July 17 2010, 16:49:47 UTC

Very powerful first chapter. Poor Adam - knowing what's going to happen and not being able to stop Peter from raping him. Poor Neil - knowing what's going on and not being able to do anything. But WTF at Leila just thinking Peter's going to beat Adam? I realize he's abusing her, too. But she should at least try to stop the "beatings." Ahhhh! What a messed up family.

I'm looking forward to reading more.

makaylaamanda July 17 2010, 17:13:49 UTC

Thanks! (:

devilishangel03 July 17 2010, 18:10:42 UTC

the way you wrote this gave me chills. so dark, yet there's still something about it that's more than just dark. your writing just amazes me. i can't wait for more.

makaylaamanda July 17 2010, 18:24:12 UTC

Whoa! Thanks bby, you just made my day!

pinkeurogirl July 17 2010, 20:54:28 UTC

poweful writing. want adam to get him and neil out of this. his mom knows what is going on but is too scared too do anything. look forward to coontinuation of this one

makaylaamanda July 18 2010, 08:44:09 UTC

Thanks! Loves! <3

draozz July 17 2010, 23:23:37 UTC

Ughh. U know ur writing a lot but it always is hard for me to read (but I'm not gonna stop!!). But poor Adam!! Peter is sick!! And why doesn't Leila do anything?? Beating Adam isn't okay too!! And also poor Neil for having to witness that. Can't wait for the next chap!! This is good (ur writing may be a bit dark but there is always a sad happy ending. Yeahh that doesn't make sense does it?)

makaylaamanda July 18 2010, 08:45:13 UTC

Thank you! Yeah, I'm a sick person, I don't know why I write these!!!