Comments | malfoil: Flow, R, Remus/Fenrir

malfoil

Flow, R, Remus/Fenrir

Aug 05, 2005 20:59

Title: Flow
Author: malfoil
Pairing: Remus/Fenrir
Rating: R
Disclaimer: They aren't mine, they're JKRs.
Summary: Fenrir bites into the skin, where he can taste blood and despair...and it's new.
Warning: Um...a little underaged sex. So if that offends you, you probably shouldn't read this.
Word Count: 850

( It has been a long, long time since he's done this. )

Comments 10

biichan August 6 2005, 04:29:29 UTC

My god. This is the most perverse thing I have ever read.

I love it.

malfoil August 6 2005, 04:30:33 UTC

Perversion is a good thing? Lol, when did that happen?

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. :D

lilith_boy August 7 2005, 00:14:26 UTC

Hmm...there's not much to say about this. It's well done, it depicts Remus' fear fairly well. Also, erm...

EEEEWWWWWW!!

I think that the first person sums up my feelings very well.

malfoil August 7 2005, 23:40:39 UTC

Ewww? Are you talking about the subject matter or the writing? I think you mean just the underage thing, but I am not sure.

Thank you for reading at any rate. I hope you liked it.

savemoony August 8 2005, 01:51:51 UTC

It's one of those things so disturbing beautiful that you want to look away, but you can't; it's like impending doom, like watching the 'train wreck' or the burning burning down. The darkness and evil of it, just, sucks you in. I will not lie, it made me sick. But it made me sick because the writing made the content even sicker since it seemed real. You played with the character and their emotions on such a human level; horrifying. If I wasn't such a 'sick' writer too, I'd say you need your head checked. So, disturbing piece, however, I doubt it was really supposed to give you warm and fuzzies in the first place ;)

malfoil August 10 2005, 05:09:12 UTC

I don't think it's good to be disturbing but I know what you mean. I think I do, at least. I wasn't sure I'd be able to write something like this, but you know how sometimes something grips you and you just can't shy away from it? This was like that. I don't know why, but this pairing just grips me. There's so much raw emotion there. It's powerful.

Thank you for saying such things and not feeling disgusted like "how could you write that?" but more like...I don't know. I'm always a bit hesitant to write things like this. I hope it worked for you. :P

savemoony August 10 2005, 15:04:13 UTC

I write fic for the television show alias and I always wrote the hardcore dark ships; I can see why this one would draw you in. When I read it in HBP I viewed it as something like this; that Greyback is just a little child molster. It sickened me; I really, really hate Greyback. I think I hate him more than Lord Voldemort. But what you did here was take that raw emotion, that sickness and pervision and channeled it into good writing. Good writing isn't always rainbows and lolipops. Sometimes you have to deal with the darker side of human nature; if you didn't, you would just be telling lies. So what I'm trying to say if I understand you need to write one. I might crave and write Greyback/Lupin before the seventh book too.

Like a dying dog anonymous August 8 2005, 21:25:30 UTC

Rihgt, this will probably turn some heads, but this reminds me of when I sat and watched my dog die. Don't worry, he had to put down, and a vet came to my house to adminster a lethal injection, and I stayed at sat by him and watched him dying. Nothing morbid-I just liked him so much and wanted to be the last thing he remembers. Like your story, watching him dying was sickening as he was doing just that-dying-but in another way, it was beautiful, not his death, but because he was leacving his pain and suffering. Like your story, it was beautiful and disgusting, disturbing and comforting-for different reasons, but also like watching my dog go through the assumedly strange experience of death to escape the clucthes of pain, it was also compulsive. At some time throughout both events, I felt like turning away-but I couldn't, or did and found myself turning back to watch-or knowing or should, but not being able to; just knowing deep down inside that I have to stop and watch....or read, in this case ( ... )

Re: Like a dying dog malfoil August 10 2005, 05:12:29 UTC

I've never had to watch any of my animals die. I haven't had many, but they tended to die quietly so I never had to be part of that pain. Death still haunts me though - the idea of it, I mean. I can't imagine what watching your dog was like.

I wanted to tell a story, that was all. I'm not sure if it was perverted or not, but sometimes people are perverted. And not in the sexual way, but in the things they enjoy. Like Fenrir.

Lol, I'm not sure what that site is. I'm still trying to make the changeover from being a reader to actually writing things, so...what's restricted.org? Are there a lot of stories like this on here? How do you get on there? Sorry for all the questions, I'm still sort of new. :/

And thank you for your comments, they were very heartfelt.

Creepy williamlongtail September 24 2006, 17:51:03 UTC

That was really perverted and somewhat creepy...but not in a bad way...in fact I liked it (maybe I am somewhat twisted...). It's a good fic. I like the pairing too (but usually Remus is not that young).

Just one thing...how old is there Remus? 'cause if he is around 13\14 or older ok, but if he is like 10\11 he wouldn't cum.