LJ Idol - Week 11 - Open Topic

[malruniel11]

The waning moon weakly lit the deer track before him as Mycke picked his way through the King's forest. Though he had never been to the abandoned cottage, he was homing to it as if he was a messenger bird. The Sight was stronger tonight. Mycke was a seasoned soldier, formerly the second highest rank in the King's personal guard, and yet something

Comments

[jacq22]

A fascinating story, the twin boys divided at birth.

As I am new and read so many I forget if you have a continuing story, it sort of sounds like that? But it is well written and has not ended here surely?

[malruniel11]

Thank you! Actually (and I didn't specify in the story yet) it's a girl and a boy.

This is the prologue for a story I'm working on. The story takes place 28 years later when the twins are well and full grown. I've not written the rest yet. I've been world building for months now, and this is the first bit I've gotten out.

[ecosopher]

It's great. Enough descriptions there to stand on its own, but I'm intrigued to know what happens.

[malruniel11]

Thank you! That's exactly my goal! I hope to have more to share later on, but we have to start somewhere!

[michikatinski]

This is riveting, my friend! My only question is---- how does the twin baby survive in a satchel while Mycke rides all day?

Can't wait to read the rest of this story. :-D You rock!!!

[malruniel11]

Thank you! I didn't go into him stopping to feed and learning to change a baby. I will, eventually, but I didn't have that all figured out in my head yet, so it didn't get added. Also, he wouldn't have the satchel all closed up. A baby has to breathe!

I can't wait to write the rest of this story! I thrills me! ^_^ <3<3<3<3

[michikatinski]

I can't wait to READ the rest of the story! Woooot!!! :-D

[malruniel11]

Of course "I thrills me" means "IT thrills me"... typing fail!

I can't wait to read the finished product! Of course, I still have to write it... and that's frustrating. I have the majority of it in my head just begging to be let out!

[noodledays]

oooh, very exciting! and I really felt for poor Mycke being thrust into the middle of this. :O

[malruniel11]

Poor Mycke is right. He doesn't even believe in this stuff that he's about to spend the rest of his life living for. Rough break for the guy.

I'm glad you liked it!

[myrna_bird]

Very intriguing!

[malruniel11]

Thank you!