Comments | mamas_minion: Dynamic Duo

mamas_minion

Dynamic Duo

Dec 01, 2016 22:29

Alden headed down the dingy alley in front of him with no small sense of trepidation. This was the only means to reaching the underground dive where Seth had asked to meet him. The sign for the bar resulted in an involuntary face-palm. It was the image of a hen being garroted. Why, oh why had he agreed to let Seth set the meeting place ( Read more... )

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Comments 18

rayaso December 3 2016, 17:40:33 UTC

I loved the way you managed to work a cyborg into the prompt! This started out as old friends/relatives in a bar, and then Bang! it became a future/sci-fi story. Well done! Anything with Yakuza, cyborgs and Guardians is going to be fun. I hope there is more.

mamas_minion December 6 2016, 00:36:59 UTC

Thank you, there will be more, I am trying to rotate between just a small group of characters for this season.

bleodswean December 6 2016, 21:42:46 UTC

Such a knack for edge-of-the-seat story-telling! So nice to see you back! I loved how this went from a hard luck bar meet up to futuristic and YAKUZA! Wowee! The dialogue is snappy!

mamas_minion December 7 2016, 02:25:10 UTC

Thank you, I appreciate that you love my dialogue it is something I really work hard at.

eternal_ot December 7 2016, 07:58:35 UTC

I loved how you casually breezed in a Cyborg. A great read! Enjoyed the dialogues, they kept me interested. Looking forward to the next instalment. Cheers! Well done.

mamas_minion December 7 2016, 21:02:55 UTC

Thank you, I enjoy writing in this universe and I am glad that you like it.

halfshellvenus December 7 2016, 08:08:05 UTC

I wasn't expecting the futuristic bent to this (probably thrown by the mead, which I've tasted and...I do not expect to survive the test of time). I like the relationship between these two-- friends-ish, but they live in different worlds and whatever is fun for one of them is trouble for the other. Still, a common purpose trumps everything. :)

mamas_minion December 7 2016, 21:07:15 UTC

Thank you, I like throwing in a surprise every once in awhile.

dmousey December 7 2016, 21:33:01 UTC

The dialogue is the prize in this piece! :) Are the brothers going to be recurring characters? Hugs and peace~~~D

mamas_minion December 8 2016, 20:36:00 UTC

Alden will be a re occurring character, Seth may pop up from time to time. So glad you love the dialogue thank you for reading.