Comments | mana_blue: He Hates Sweets

mana_blue

He Hates Sweets

Mar 20, 2006 14:38

Made a short drabble while reviewing Basic Statistics and Natural Science on the dining table. Starting to make up for all the times I've wasted due to my excessive stubborness and lack of ideas. From this day ownards, expect for more and more of my literary works.
Title: He hates sweets ( Read more... )

anime: naruto

Comments 13

_acerbitas_ March 20 2006, 16:47:31 UTC

<3 That was a really cute idea, you have some good descriptions going on there. I like the concept, your writing is very sweet. You portrayed a cute scene here.

I think you need to watch your grammar, however. Make sure to not switch between tenses, which you seem to do alot. Also, make sure all your sentences make sense.

<3

mana_blue March 21 2006, 05:20:42 UTC

yeah I know, I'm kinda sleepy when I wrote that I forgot to check some grammar errors. Gomen! I'll make sure to check next time.

_acerbitas_ March 21 2006, 06:28:08 UTC

That's okay! I really liked it! ^____^ Thanks so much for posting it, that pairing just doesn't get enough love! ^_^

mana_blue March 21 2006, 07:59:49 UTC

I know, but I think they are one heck of a couple!

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wingsover March 20 2006, 19:35:08 UTC

Squee, SasuTen! (my favorite crack!pairing next to NaruHanabi) And I love how Sasuke is jealous of a candy. He's really a little KSP spotlight hog, isn't he? But in this case it's cute.

mana_blue March 22 2006, 07:42:38 UTC

thanks for that comment, and because of the good feedbacks, i'm planning to write another one.

bubble March 20 2006, 20:02:02 UTC

Aww...wow! This was so sweet and endearing. I'm glad to see more SasuTen fiction in the world. I agree with everyone else who reviewed/commented on this. Good work.

mana_blue March 22 2006, 07:43:32 UTC

thank so much!. Thanks everyone!. You are and still continuing to inspire me! don't worry I'll make more ^^

bubble March 22 2006, 20:41:59 UTC

You're welcome. I'm glad to see that we are all inspiring you. And if you could, please advertise for your fellow TemaSasu lovers. Tell your friends about tensasutema, okay?

mana_blue March 23 2006, 09:56:28 UTC

sure no prob! ^^

tao_empress March 21 2006, 02:37:39 UTC

ah, it does my SasuTen heart some good to read this. and so the revolution continues, hehe. though I myself prefer sour to sweet, I don't think it would be half as cute if they had like a sour jolly rancher. then again, they could do the whole "Lady and the Tramp" spagetti scene with some sour gummy worms. -thinks- maybe...I'll make a note to write that one day.

mana_blue March 21 2006, 05:09:22 UTC

omg! really sorry for the off grammars. but anyways, i'm happy you like it! *squeels of happiness*