Comments | mangoleah: Another go at it.....

mangoleah

Another go at it.....

Apr 16, 2006 22:08

So friend of friends, can you stand to read this one more time ( Read more... )

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iamnotsilly April 17 2006, 03:29:46 UTC

*applauds* Very nice. It's compelling and personal. The language in the intro is wonderful. I know that when applying to English grad programs they want to know that you can develop and articulate possible projects even if you never end up working on them. You toss around the projects you thought of in the Amazon. Are there any you would really want to develop and that would relate to this program? Also, why include this sentence: The organization has emerged as a regional name and been featured in Metropolis a national magazine. If you had something to do with that, claim it. If not, I don't think it's really important. How could you use the skills you learned at WMEAC in the future? You've shown you have the experience, now tell us how you plan to use it. Also, I don't have time to look for grammatical mistakes, but I suggest you have the most nit-picky person you know look it over before sending it. I had a prof say "If we see one mistake in an application, we toss it ( ... )

mangoleah April 17 2006, 14:11:20 UTC

Yay! Thank you. I feel good about this draft too. I hope to join this programme (with an 'm'e' baby, yeah.)

will more notes help? ludo_lun April 18 2006, 19:37:16 UTC

Hi,

I see you have an edit. I can give it a good look over in a few hours, if it can help you at all (I'm at work right now). When is it due in the mail?

Re: will more notes help? mangoleah April 18 2006, 21:56:40 UTC

I am working on it right now so yes, notes would be good unless they are 'major concerns'. I'll email it to them tomorrow.

Hey, I saw you at Hugo's dark party. I don't know if you know who I am so I meant to introduce myself but never made it over. Next time.

thanks,
Leah

Re: will more notes help? ludo_lun April 19 2006, 03:18:36 UTC

Of course I know you. Nick Certa was just reading over my shoulder and confirmed such. I thought that dog in your picture looked familiar. But Nick says Jen took it to NC. Sad.

ludo_lun April 19 2006, 00:23:53 UTC

I think the content of this essay if very strong and very personal. It has a good flow consistent with your personality and passion. Having said that, I'm going to focus mostly on grammar. I'm not the best grammarian, but these are changes I'm suggesting you look into. Most deal with the dreaded comma ( ... )

mangoleah April 19 2006, 03:11:59 UTC

Thank god somebody know where the commas go! Remind me to buy you a sandwich next time I see you.

no sandwich necessary ludo_lun April 19 2006, 03:15:40 UTC

My pleasure to help you. A cup of coffee and conversation is all the payment I need, and not even that.

I know I know you, but I have to see you to confirm. I'm also sorry it didn't happen at Hugo's.

But soon? Before you go to England? I studied in Kingston for a while.

J

Re: no sandwich necessary mangoleah April 19 2006, 03:35:15 UTC

Jamaica?
Hi Nick Certa! I hung out in your fort tonight.

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