Vampyre's Journal

[mannlich]

Walking quitely down the side streets the night falls dark as the moon is covered away by fog and clouds. I smell in the air warm beating blood passing slowly and caustiously through the dark

Comments

[darkkawaii]

Good story! ^_^

[mannlich]

Cool, thanx dudette. :) -Mannlich

[the_snowbunny]

Awesome!

(but if your going to change tense you should make it a new paragraph ...god da*ned english classes are getting me ... run... hehe)

[mannlich]

I know not of tenses, adjectives, and all that jazz. I am well aware of my bad english, if you could point it out I can try to correct it for next time. -Mannlich

[anonymous]

It's a great little blurb.
[The 'tense' problem, no big. It's just in 2 places. Nothing a few quotation marks couldn't fix. ^_^]

~ Quita

[mannlich]

Once again, thanx for helping me out. -Mannlich

[lookintomyeyes]

I echo everyone else, its definitely a good story.
I know you can't work on it yet, but I'm still waiting for you to finish off where we left off on the one we started.

[mannlich]

Yah I know, give it time. -Mannlich