The Real LJ Idol * Season 11 * Week 20: Boondoggle

Apr 28, 2020 15:12

We stood heel to heel ( Read more... )

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halfshellvenus May 2 2020, 21:09:10 UTC
I really liked this as a description of a failed relationship, especially subtle points like the emotional turmoil and complexity inside the narrator leading her/him to believe that the other person was similarly deep and perhaps mysterious when in fact they might have been nearly empty inside.

as you pushed each
and every one of the
anchored conditions
for loving me
into the water,
I loved every part of this, and the imagery of the reassurances being shackles (when that's how they're being used, to bind the narrator to the relationship when they are nothing but lies used to disguise why she/he should flee).

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tonithegreat May 2 2020, 22:15:06 UTC
Boom! This was a powerful poem. Do you know the show Stephen Universe? It’s made for the youth, so it’s wrong that I think of it reading this, but the imagery reminds me of the character Lapis from the show. So many chains and isolation and water. I’m so very glad you kept swimming.

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