I love your ending metaphor of the day being "lazy and sullen"
And the simile of "Dreams scrawled out like a ribbon" is just lovely! It's one of those "ah, that's so perfect" phrases. And you just want to sit awhile and savor a poem like this.
It's true isn't it? Sometimes in dreams we do have "a kind of freedom we never have in waking life" (as you say). That's such a great way to put it. I've woken up and wished I could be so free and easy with my sister as I was in my dream.
You capture such beauty in your poetry. Thank you so much for sharing your creativity with us!
You paint such a great picture of lazy mornings - I'm not one to wake up slowly normally, but I've been known to have a few of these mornings myself. :)
I like that this poem isn't just reveling in the morning laziness, but reaching back into the past and wondering what your ancestors would think if they saw you now. Yes, they might think badly of someone who doesn't wake before the sun and get right to work, as they needed to in their days, but I think it's also true that they might recognize that they were working so hard for their own descendants to have a better life, and they might actually be happy to see it.
I don't feel much connection with my ancestors/have no idea what kind of future they would've liked, but I liked the way you captured that history and made it present.
I've struggled with this too. But I think about how hard things must have been for what little I do know about just a couple generations back. I like to think they are proud of where I am now.
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I am so flattered 🖤
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I love your ending metaphor of the day being "lazy and sullen"
And the simile of "Dreams scrawled out like a ribbon" is just lovely! It's one of those "ah, that's so perfect" phrases. And you just want to sit awhile and savor a poem like this.
It's true isn't it? Sometimes in dreams we do have "a kind of freedom we never have in waking life" (as you say). That's such a great way to put it. I've woken up and wished I could be so free and easy with my sister as I was in my dream.
You capture such beauty in your poetry. Thank you so much for sharing your creativity with us!
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Thank you so kindly for that heartfelt feedback! I am always so pleased to hear which parts stood out for someone.
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I like that this poem isn't just reveling in the morning laziness, but reaching back into the past and wondering what your ancestors would think if they saw you now. Yes, they might think badly of someone who doesn't wake before the sun and get right to work, as they needed to in their days, but I think it's also true that they might recognize that they were working so hard for their own descendants to have a better life, and they might actually be happy to see it.
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I think about this a lot, especially lately.
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I don't have a strong connection to ancestors, but I am trying.
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I've struggled with this too. But I think about how hard things must have been for what little I do know about just a couple generations back. I like to think they are proud of where I am now.
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