The Real LJ Idol * 3 Strikes * Week 5: Kuchisabishii

[marlawentmad]

A yearning ache pulled at her day and night

Comments

[mollywheezy]

Very creative use of the prompt with intriguing imagery! Well done!

[bleodswean]

So much IMAGERY, T! The ocean is the most elemental archetype/metaphor/analogy/poem/myth/goddess. And you bring that knowledge, that cognizance to your work (with so many elemental motifs) and create very tangible and graspable pictures out of things that are so often beyond comprehension. I love that. It's not that you make Big things Smaller, but that you make Big things Conceivable. That's fertility, that's power. I adore this and hear its beckon - She accepted the invitation of
clinking broken shells..

[marlawentmad]

Oh, you sure know how to fill my cup! I am so thankful for a reader like you. Your feedback always sends me over the moon. I am going to return to this compliment again and again, to bolster.

[bleodswean]

What are we here for, darling, if not to fill one another's cups? Hold on to those things that reassure you and learn from those that set your teeth on edge!

[itismeangied]

Ooh I love the way it pulls you in. The imagery is awesome and I love the visceral ending. Chomp!

[d0gs]

Oooh I adore this, especially the last verse. The imagery here is absolutely amazing!