Yeah, when I got that note in my email and -- surprise, surprise!, it wasn't something involving testing! (XD) -- I checked it out and it was a reader insert and I was shocked. Literally shocked. Dumb done founded me cause I was like, "WHAT?!?!"
Yeah. A reader insert from YOU was perhaps the last thing I expected. I was just... shocked. I mean it's... it'd be like if I wrote one! XD
But anyway, anyway: I'll take you'd rather I review it over there (and it is very difficult not being able to do it here! XD); but I thought I'd mention this...
The sentence(s), "His Adam's apple bobs as he swallows hard. Yes - yes, there is."
Shouldn't the, "Yes - yes, there is.," have quotes around it?
I think, at least, it was suppose to be... oh... I forgot his name already! Yeah, but the client talking.
Can I ask what happened though? You know, like earlier in the mission, and why they were hired? What the 'delicate' details were? (...If you have them.)
You pulled like Kishimoto's, "that jutsu," move (where he tells you about that jutsu: and
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Ack, you didn't have to! Now I have to reply a couple times. lol
Yeah, I did it. I'm getting very annoyed with all the inserts lately. Some of them are just.. nasty. (Why Gaara of all people?! Let that kid continue his therapy in peace!)
They're not that hard to write. Saves a lot of thought not having to describe the main character much.
Err, yeah, I forgot some quotation marks in there. Thanks. ^^;
Honestly, I didn't even think the story through so I have no idea. I just got bored and started writing. I suppose I could pull it back out and try to complete the story for real this weekend.
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Yeah. A reader insert from YOU was perhaps the last thing I expected. I was just... shocked. I mean it's... it'd be like if I wrote one! XD
But anyway, anyway: I'll take you'd rather I review it over there (and it is very difficult not being able to do it here! XD); but I thought I'd mention this...
The sentence(s), "His Adam's apple bobs as he swallows hard. Yes - yes, there is."
Shouldn't the, "Yes - yes, there is.," have quotes around it?
I think, at least, it was suppose to be... oh... I forgot his name already! Yeah, but the client talking.
Can I ask what happened though? You know, like earlier in the mission, and why they were hired? What the 'delicate' details were? (...If you have them.)
You pulled like Kishimoto's, "that jutsu," move (where he tells you about that jutsu: and ( ... )
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Yeah, I did it. I'm getting very annoyed with all the inserts lately. Some of them are just.. nasty. (Why Gaara of all people?! Let that kid continue his therapy in peace!)
They're not that hard to write. Saves a lot of thought not having to describe the main character much.
Err, yeah, I forgot some quotation marks in there. Thanks. ^^;
Honestly, I didn't even think the story through so I have no idea. I just got bored and started writing. I suppose I could pull it back out and try to complete the story for real this weekend.
*glomps!* Thanks
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