Flashbacks Of A Fool Chp 8

Aug 11, 2013 21:18

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obsessive_a101 August 15 2013, 00:10:26 UTC
Is this the end? (O________O) *shakes head and begs - no*

As always, you take the most INCREDIBLE of situations and circumstances and manage to make them believable, even when they are twisted and painful in their contortions.

I am now going to go and curl up in a ball and drown myself in my own tears. Thank you very much for writing this realistic, heart-wrenching, gutting, and "lovely" story.

*stumbles off in a daze while slow clapping attempts commence even while tears continue falling*

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marzipanilla August 15 2013, 00:23:46 UTC
Thank you so much! Heh. Actually, this was originally part one of a two part story, but my original thoughts on where to take things after this don't work for me anymore- so if there is more, it won't be for a while...

Glad you could enjoy this despite the tears.

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obsessive_a101 August 15 2013, 01:18:38 UTC
Yeah... I didn't realize that I could read something that would actually manage to traumatize me MORE on a visceral level than watching the canon already did, but you certainly managed. ;)

I do wonder now where they go from here (and well, I'll be honest, LAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAUUUUUURAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! *sobs*), and oh, now that I've gathered my pieces a bit more together now, I liked how you played around with the idea of "home" thematically with Bill and Laura in the flashbacks - especially since we know where exactly that went with regards to their relationship by the end of the show in canon-verse. I just, *am still rather shell-shocked by all the trauma*...

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marzipanilla August 15 2013, 02:11:49 UTC
Muhahahaha, erh, -cough- I gave extra warnings on the Epics post that nothing good happens to Laura here... Nothing particularly wonderful would happen in a continuation either.

What happens in the flashbacks was originally a bit different, but I am quite glad with the home theme that managed to keep popping up for the end product. Glad you enjoyed that element as well!

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newnumbertwo August 16 2013, 23:34:21 UTC
I love the detachment she feels here, as things are clearly happening outside the hospital that's affecting her time within it. Such a reasonable thought process for that situation. And then the possibility of escape within her reach. She's not doing well, but she's determined, so maybe she can make it out and to a ship...

Glad she and Bill were on their way to patching things up. It's a shame they never got the chance to have that meeting, though.

I love the way this fic was divided and organized. The flashbacks and present story were equally compelling. I love the way you write NC--every bit as ugly as I imagine it to be.

♥ ♥ ♥

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marzipanilla August 17 2013, 02:18:40 UTC
Ah, Laura's mental state... -pets gently-

The two of them almost got a little more, but I decided in the end to be more cruel.

The structure of this story was a big factor in why I wanted to write it. It was just a fun format... though I nearly wanted to break it a few times in the writing process when I got frustrated with some things. Damn non cooperative characters.. -mumblemumblemumble-

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afrakaday September 10 2013, 13:15:37 UTC
The way these two scenes play off one another is brilliant. The door is always open/I'm just a phone call away.

Oh, Laura. Poor bb. You get inside her head so well.

It was such a pleasure to see you develop this original idea and bring it to completion. I would love to see a post-reunion epilogue someday. :)

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marzipanilla September 10 2013, 19:05:14 UTC
Thanks :)

I've tossed my original thoughts for what would happen after this out the window. It's all sort of just a murky mess of potential at this point.

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