D-Day Anniversary. Part 2

[mase992]

April 11, 1945. 3:15 P.M.

Etter Mountain. Weimar, Germany. Buchenwald concentration camp.

“This is too much… those sons of bitches…!”

Alfred nodded. He didn’t need to turn to know Kirkland was beside him, looking with horror at the pile of bodies. Their faces were drawn with pain and starvation, bony limbs were twisted in unnatural directions (

Comments

[catgirlprime]

I'd love to stand and applaud your writing, but I'm just too teary to try.
Great job, AMAZING writing; I loved the creativity, though some bits I, admittedly, could've done without. The native languages should've all had translations, I think, even if they weren't entirely important to your story.
WWII is one of my favourite wars to read about, fiction and non. Thank you for such an interesting read.

=^..^=~

[mase992]

Teary? Oh... *hands kerchief* (you just don't know how happy this comment makes me ;v;)

I see. Which bits, if you may and please, what would you recommend then? Thanks for the honesty!

All right. I may add the rest of the translations, then, for further understanding.

No, thank you for taking your time to read this and commenting!
As you can see, I'm a major WWII freak so you're not alone here.

[catgirlprime]

It's no biggie, really; I just have my preferences as to what I enjoy reading more. I can honestly do without sexual references, but I'm not much of a romance fan, and if I remember your little bio-thing, you are, so...yea. |D;;;

I also work as an English editor, though, so I'm afraid I was getting nit-picky while reading, and that's the source of my sourness. [[I read parts one and two just now, so it's not this one part I'm referring to.]] Way back when Alfred was in bed with Arthur, you somehow were mentioning a woman on top, a woman beside, but only one woman he paid for. I found bits like that dealing with either confusion or inconsistency that made me sit back a moment and muddle through it.

Let me say, however, that I find you've got quite a talent for writing; it's rare that I say that...
[[Because I'm so damn picky and stubborn. >v<']]

=^..^=~

[mase992]

Haha, yeah as you can see I love romance and well, while I was working on this story for my speech I read that both the French and the American soldiers were known for being quite promiscuous. So I shamelessly used that as an excuse to add a brief encounter between England and America. And France, of course, found his way in as well....;; Urgh, sorry. I followed my fangirl muse which I know is something I should stop doing, truthfully but heck, believe me, it was funny to see the shocked faces of many of my classmates when I read that bit

[sailorkagura07]

Wow... these were really nicely written! And poor Arthur... ;_; And did Kiku die too??? ;_;
Anyway... really really nice portrayal of Alfred and D-Day and the months following. It was a welcome Hetalia-fication to D-Day celebrations! ^______^

[mase992]

I'm afraid both did die... :( but hell, we both know they're really alive and kickin'! ;D

Thank you! I had a blast writing this one. And Alfred is always fun to write, of course!

Happy post-D-day, btw XD.

[sailorkagura07]

Arthur I could tell, but Kiku was questionable... within the story line. >.>' Indeed they are, fulfilling our historical fan-dreams. ^____^
You're welcome! ^---^ Because Alfred is Alfred. XD
(Still D-Day by me, so...) Happy D-Day to you too. ^_____^

[mase992]

Well, Kiku's death is a tad ambiguous. You could say he survived the impact but the toll it took on him will eventually lead to his death.

Hm, indeed. That's why we love him (and England).

[amethyst_amore]

This fic was amazing. The way you explained each event through the eyes of human Alfred rather then nation Alfred made it that much more gripping. I had tears in my eyes at certain points. (Poor Arthur and Kiku...) I loved the scene with Francis and Alfred looking at Paris, the bit with Arthur and the german soldiers, and the scene with Ivan a lot.

But Alfred's disgust with his own nation's behavior really had me nodding and feeling a connection to the character, because, let's face it. One can love their country and even die for it, but there are some things the government may do that doesn't sit well with us. That feeling, I'm siue goes for anyone and any nation.

Much love for this and thank you for writing for this memorable day in history.

[mase992]

Thank you so much for this lovely comment, truly

[tuulensisko]

I really try not to think about all these things too much but sometimes you have to, to understand what people are able to do.

Thank you, it was beautiful and intense and horrible. Very much as it should be.

I think... the worst was that man dying right after being liberated in the camp. Such a... powerful image. Unfortunately I believe many, many of them died soon after. I've seen pictures and... they really were like living skeletons. When you are in a condition like that it's possible to die just out of relief.

I just... don't know what to say really, even though I feel like I should. To talk it out if nothing else. The anxiety.

But I do love fics that take a different view of things, like depicting the characters as humans, it's interesting. And I like to see the darker side of this fandom. It's like the meat of the meal. =A= Even though I'm kind of a vegetarian. Sorry for the stupid simile.

[tuulensisko]

Oh, and I loved the... French air of the first part. Really good job with it, I think. And all those anecdotes~

[mase992]

Phew... I'm glad that came out well. There were parts that were pain to write. Sometimes finding the right words was difficult, I rewrote or modified the Paris section at least thrice so THANK YOU!

[mase992]

That's one of the reasons why History is there, to remind us of the many horrible mistakes we've done and hopefully to learn from them. It is always a depressing and shocking thing to remember... the Holocaust but sometimes, indeed, we simply cannot ignore what happened. I'm just applying my own emotions and pov's with this

[mase992]

Thank you very much for taking the time to comment and read this! I really appreciate it! :}

Well, actually, after I heard it I felt that I would be pretty scared if someone sang it to me on a rainy night. And that's the special thing about it, it's non-conventional melody for a children lullaby I suppose. (Honey, we're al weird ;).)

Ah no... I made mistakes in the Russian sentece since I'm not a native speaker and I'm just learning so I kinda only used an online translator for this. Could you provide corrections, perhaps?

The countless raping cases were, indeed, brutal. I read a passage from the book "The Blonde Knight of Germany" with situations where rapes were commited. I shuddered. Horrible how low we can fall, isn't it?

Thank you, again! ^0^

[mase992]

Well, at least you're better at it than me so I'll trust your correction, of course. Thank you for it! I believe my version were only literal translations of the English sentence so there were no grammatical modifications or even linking between words. Ah... I really need to learn Russian now, to save myself, heh.

Well, translators are also pretty bad with Spanish so I can agree with you there on their unreliability most of the times...

Oh-- but all those languages are so beautiful, I'm anxious to learn them. I'm actually just starting Russian (as you can easily notice, oops) because of my ancestry and I've got my eye on Polish for later...

Anyway, I'm rambling... thank you so much!