A monolouge I wrote, please give honest opinions

[mason_le_flamme]

Sometimes I wake up... and I think to myself “could today be the day, the day where finally I can seclude myself from this hellish nightmare. Just get up, go to work, talk to my friends, then after 5 o’clock go to the pub and reprieve myself from a hard days work”. But as I look around my bedroom with my posters of pop idols and game characters,

Comments

[thenxtspielberg]

I think this is very well-written, I wish I could hear u actually speak it. To answer ur question, I think this person is feeling a lot of frustration and a sense of powerlessness at being caught in between childhood and adulthood. But from the last paragraph I also get that this person's pent up frustration won't let him remain powerless for much longer. I dunno if that's what u were goin for. Ne way, sounds good.

[mason_le_flamme]

I never really thought of it as that deep, but looking back on it using your analysis, that seems to be exactly pinpointed... i never intended to write something that could be so well analysed but it seems to have itergrated itself in the text anyway :)
But anyway, so far there has been no wrong answer in the analysis so thankyou so far :)